Kickin back, feet up, at work and still rhymin
Tryin to see if this site is real or nickel and dime-in
Pickin up my battle axe and my sharpening steel
Just reachin out tryin to cop me a feel
What is the flava on this rhyme battle site?
Is there any chill cats er y'all just lookin to fight?
I gotta big bag of words I'm just waitin ta spill
This is just an introduction, later on we'll git ill
Open up your ear holes and gimme a shout
I'm bout to be a stain here and never come out....

Payce
Newbian

.......too short,even thoguth it was an introduction,thats the length of my introductions an doutros on my shit...i cant say nohign abou tthis its,like how many abrs let me count....10 bars,thi sshits a quick battle verse ype lenght,not an open mic peice...my thoguhts....
i thoguht th erhyme was aiight though to b ehonest,it was mad simple,but no doubt i guess i have to let it go coz its obviously just a quick thing,but it flowed pretty good throught...need legnth cat,post a whole osng and ill critique it properly...

peep m drops...

zions and my idea of a quick verse...

Sittin here at work with nothin to do
Figure I'll spew some words for me and you
I got 26 years under my old fart belt
I like to whip my girls, on their ass leave a welt
I don't do drugs and I drink when I can
I was a crazy kid, now I am a smoove cat man
Sometimes I get crazy, gotta release some heat
Thats when words flow from me and logic takes a back seat
I say what I feel and I feel what I say
You'll know when I am for real and when I am just here to play
Society upsets me and are leaders get me down
But I ain't here to lecture or on yer face put a frown
I listen mostly to hip-hop but I gotta lotta jazz in my heart
I'm gonna cut it off here, thats enough for a start

Didn't know the protocol was an entire song
I didn't intend my first post to be all that long
Long like a snake it coils up before it strikes
Long like a 12 incher that every lady likes
Here is a sample, test it, run your exam again please
10 bars? I don't measure, just rhyme, follow ma steez?
Send somethin my way and show a rook how its done
Bend over sideways and do me some tricks, go on son!
I don't want no battles, what would that prove?
That I can only go ten lines before I lose all my groove?
Sing a song for 6 pence, Pocket full of rhyme
I keep my meessage clean with no dirt and no grime
Just tryin to release some pressure and do it with class
Attempt to remain smooth, polite, calm and not crass
What would make an entire song? How many lines would that be?
I have heard a million tunes with no more lines than the chorus+3
So here I go with something longer I hope this shit is better?
Something bigger, fatter, nicer to get your mamma wetter
For real tho, don't take me personal, I'm just gettin my flow on
I never claimed to be no pro or any type of lyrical words don

payce
newbian

nah is all good aint takin the shi tpersonal,you sounding mad old school to me dun,no doubt,some of that shit was funky ahha,youobviously jsut keystylin this shit,my bad,i thoguth maybe that wa sall you were oding,it happens,fools com eon drop ths'written shit'and its like 10 bars long nahmean...you should do ome battle shit i think,you ddo aiight,need some grimey shi tin there unfortunatley,but i understand you rflow now you sayin you into the jazz and shit...my bad if you got offened or nothing,i just thought ou was comin up on here postin gsmall shit and expecting feedback an buggin ou ton everyone else s hit,it happens alot,just cant tell nahmean,ou like the fresh prince a jazz or osemtign ahha,sall good im jus playin dun...im likin this coz its originality nahmean,not like someshit im seein...i dont give a fuck how long th everse was its just im sick of cats doin what i mentioned earlier nahmean,didnt mean nothign by it neither,im likin this,keep droppin

bismillah
im still thinkin its simple,but i can just hear this playin over osme jazzy shit,with like this ill cat jumpna roun to it pittin this,its almost oldschool nahmean...and i canaccept the simpleness of thi sshit nahmean,coz i kinda got an idea inmy head o fhow itd sound....

no one understands a fucking word your saying...

lmao...this is my first post..
what the hell are you doing
princess...

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