...Spiderman!


Topical thing at another board, figured id drop it here for a little feedback. .

You join our hero on a summers day,
chillin besides a fence
He’d hit some Mary Jane,
head was ringing, but it wasn’t Spider Sense.
Suddenly he spotted Eddie Brock
harassing these three children
So it was time he changed into latex behind the nearest building.
Within seconds he was dressed,
Red and Blue from head to foot
hitting Brock with Two Sets of Fore Arms,
like Doctor Octopus.
Plus, Eddie was slow on foot. .
making him easier to pursue
And Peter left him more Black and Blue than his Venom Costume.
A cheering crowd had gathered
to witness his web - slingin’
As Peter used his adhesive webbing to bag this Super-Villain
Ten minutes later
and Peter was dressed back as usual,
Working as a freelance photographer for The Daily Bugle
Selling his pictures to the editor. .
J. Jonah Jameson
Seeing “Spider Man, Or Spider Menace?”
spread across the front page again.
Even though no one knows he works his ass off to save their city
He remembers that
‘With great power comes great responsibility’
The line his uncle Ben uttered to him before he’s passed away
The line that helped make peter parker the man he is today
Living with aunt may,
dating the school bombshell with your future planned -

I wish my life was a comic book,
Damn, id love to live a day as Spider Man.

hey man thats pretty good. It is KINDA fucked up tho cos its about spiderman. Having said that i thought there were some wicked lines in there like
"and Peter was dressed back as usual,
Working as a freelance photographer for The Daily Bugle"
that one made me sit back & kinda go 'nice!' keep it up

man they should be doing topical leagues on here i swear...itd be mad fun....i liked it ahha,anythign that has an origianl topic is ill...but spiderman...ahhaha...i never thoguht id see a verse about spider man haha...liked it indeed.... clever how you did iit....peter dressed in black as usual...freelabnce photographer at the daily bugle...you must read the comics or saw th emovie or somehting igh t?ahha....liked it vortex.....


bismillah

Yeah, im a pretty big Marvel fan, i had to go find a site for venoms real name though, i couldnt remember it - lol.

i never knew carnage had a real name...blah i mean venom ahha....well then...learnt sometin havent i...

This was aight , , ,, Man who ever thought that an emcee would Flow about spider man , , Lol , ,, Tha story Tellin was Ill dawg , , keep spittin

Actually, the young rap group "Another Bad Creation" did a rap about spiderman about 10 years ago.

Anyways... this rhyme was pretty good. A little too basic but at the same time thats what I liked about it.

7/10

aha! No doubt, ive never heard those guys but drop me the track over PM and i'll get it off soul seek or whatever. .

Carnage and venom both have real names, they were both criminals with two alien symbiotes. .

Nice to get all the positive feedback though.