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Old 05-12-03, 10:56 AM   #1
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Somethings come and go.

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young Joey was eight years old . already tired of living.
he resided in the slums family forever poverty stricken.
crime infested decisions made his life pale and callous.
envied the the best kid. jail filled him with hate and malice.
he was a deliquent in his own mind. life was always fucked.
but a stroke of luck and happiness came in with a paintbrush.
paint loved joey in the exact same way that he loved the art.
the brush was his flashlight and his road was very dark.
no longer did he get depressed when obstacles came to view.
he found a possesion with a use and used art to get through.

Joey was 18 struggling to eat. wishing food where his hand is.
damnit. depression couldnt enter because he had his canvas.
his paintbrush made happiness run in and through his veins.
and art was still his pick me up. that helped him in his days.
he didnt need crime. only the cells in his brain . what he seeked.
was an intellect only an artist inherits. to construct a masterpiece.
he painted all day usually until his hands began to horribly hurt.
after he finished. he stared into its light. he never sold his work.
and it was left in storage. beautiful and never to be disturbed.

joey was 38 a wife to kids life was nothing but not amazing.
struggling to eat he decided it was time to sell his paintings.
and he considered it the best idea though reluctant he did.
his eyes possessed fire when he heard the first million dollar bid.
shit! he was rich he went to unload the work into the buyers van.
and the door slammed unexpectedly taking both of his hands.
damn. he woke up in a hospital wife and kids by his side.
whispering the lies. that everything will eventually be alright.
they left. and one night he went to the window. from story 10.
and attempted to fly. knowing that he could never paint again.


...ahh sorry for the sloppiness...had to write this in about 10 minutes..something i was thinking about...i know flow is off and on. but i am more concerned with my content. let me know what you think...
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Old 05-12-03, 11:25 AM   #2
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Another dope piece from Sands.... i dont expect anything less... .Nice drop... Dope imagery as usual... to bad everything posted cant be as good as this... Peace
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Old 05-12-03, 01:02 PM   #3
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sand......nice drop man,you always go the most original shit on your drops,and i read it all the way through just to atch the twist at the end of em all,i relaly enjoyed readin gthis one,shit makes you think,hed still have his hands and his family and his life even,if he didnt give in to mney,bt he had no choice i guess,where the fuck you think this shit up dun.....

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Old 05-12-03, 01:26 PM   #4
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I'm feeling it man, I haven't been here in a while and this the first thing I read... shit was dope man, the imagery and metaphores where nice, poetic shit man, the flow was aight, and all your rhymes where pretty good...

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Old 05-12-03, 01:39 PM   #5
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lol. aetrack.
they come from
the way back of
my head. and
they are endless
i just dont have
time to write them
all down. thanks
for the feedback
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Old 05-12-03, 03:53 PM   #6
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thats dope sand..i like the whole story line and alltho i cud tell he'd die the way ya brought it back about him bein 10...good stuff ill peep some more
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Old 05-12-03, 04:38 PM   #7
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Old 05-12-03, 06:09 PM   #8
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damn man, all your work is so sad. Ill, but sad. I liked how you skipped through time, starting at 8 and ending at 38, nice switch there. It was cool that his perspective never changed until the end when he betrayed his art and sold it, and lost his ability to create it.

paint loved joey in the exact same way that he loved the art.
the brush was his flashlight and his road was very dark.

My favourite bar, right near the beginning, good meta.
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Old 05-12-03, 06:59 PM   #9
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the point of the story is....

what he thought would bring him happiness...
(money...riches)
turned out to be nothing since he didnt have
what he truly loved...

he had found his true love. and was seeking something
else...he didnt really know until he lost it...
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Old 05-12-03, 07:00 PM   #10
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Sand alwayz spitz Fire............his vocab is Ill as fuck , , and when it comes too wordplay , Sand has it all ,,,,,,,,, Ill drop dawg ,, keep spittin
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Old 05-12-03, 07:34 PM   #11
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daim this was creative and original as fuck..

really feelin this shit dunz..

we got some ill topical heads on this site, its a shame the league gets slept on and shit...

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Old 05-12-03, 07:56 PM   #12
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holy fuck , sick ass drop dawg
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Old 05-12-03, 11:40 PM   #13
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Damn. Mad imagery. Captivating content, all the way thru. Overall ingenius piece. Perfectly executed. Much propz.

>paint loved joey in the exact same way that he loved the art.
the brush was his flashlight and his road was very dark.

^favorite line.
Stay up with this n keep blessin us
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Old 05-13-03, 09:12 AM   #14
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shit almost made me cry... jus playin....
Good shit from sand , metaphors were all that...

paint loved joey in the exact same way that he loved the art.
the brush was his flashlight and his road was very dark.

like everyone else thats my fav line
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Old 05-13-03, 09:13 AM   #15
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that was nice man, i felt it.anywayz lalalalallalaallalalla dam 100 characteristics allalalalallalala
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