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Feed Me Back
IP: F10B 0FBE
yo feed me back
Manic Killer, u'll remember the name// hes that mothafuka who put u to shame// cut u down from head to toe// motha to ho, brotha to foe// u were murdered with his vicious flow// battled the killa but there was no real fight// hes outta sight god damn right// that u were left speechless after his lines flew tight// shakin in yo boots, scared shitless// shit shot down without a witness// take another look back at manic// over ur shoulder in a panic// no where to turn, too much to learn// catchinin up is an impossibility, battlin with manic is a regret// losin is the only probability, thats worth takin a bet// on, yo gone, so long, i think i hear a pop song// made just for u, go buy it// and take this shit outta my face// u willl never keep up the manic pace// thats it im done dont rip on it too hard im a newb + i KNOW that it was a little 'battle based' man who cares just tell me what u think PLEASE VOTE!!!! ------ SERIOUSLY JUST CHECK IT OUT AND VOTE http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=47924 peace |
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IP: 3FF9 C72A
ermm it wasnt that bad atually to be honest,you need to up your vocab,and spit about somethign else,but yeah it wasnt too bad...need to work some more on flow and syllable placement,bu tother then that it was ok...it was very simple,but droppinmore will help that...
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IP: F10B 0FBE
yeh it was a little simple esp at the start, thnx for the feedback, droppin more wot yo mean? sorry ima newb.
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BANNED for biting
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IP: FF98 53B8
Another newbie , and another whack drop , , ,, u newbies should elevate
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IP: EB21 FAD6
^^ lmao
Its too simple. Structure is falling, no vocab, no wordplay, weak topic. |
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IP: F10B 0FBE
un-skrypted thnx fo some feedback even if its harsh. but bash, why rip on a newb thats just lookin for some help? nobody starts at the top.
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