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06-09-03, 05:46 PM
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IP: CBA6 C522
Another one of my poems, I didnt re-do it or read it over its kinda old but I wanted words on it so i posted it.
Have I gone crazy? My views are all hazy now only seeing the bad in it all I cant take another fall, My life is crap, I wanna all out hit someone, but I dont..cause I know, The life i have is my own fault, Wanna lock it all up in a vault start anew, trade places, enter a new race, my heart is pacing, i feel like im on a pill each day brings a new thrill, Im going end it all with a trip down hill, then dig a hole and rest, knowing im not the best.. I was a fool to think so.... |
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06-09-03, 07:14 PM
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IP: CBA6 C522
Just pushing it back to the top for some reviews.
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06-11-03, 12:18 AM
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IP: 640C 3FBD
I'm not too sure about this one. Looks like you kind of forced some of the rhyming on it. I don't really like writings where people feel sorry for themselves in it either. You did that a little bit here. So, I wasn't feeling this one a whole lot. Not my type of writing. I'm sure someone else will respond saying they liked it.
"My views are all hazy now only seeing the bad in it all" Try to see the good in the bad things that happen. Well, they may not be good, but there's some words on your post for you.. |
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