I Got The Anatomi Of A Dead Scientist Dying And Skrip Craying In My Mind And The Words Flaying....
My Flows Cold And Straps Gats To More Kids Than KKK Front Soil Whyle The Sold Foil Stabilises The Oil....
Swith Disses With Me And Get Cabirities In The Same Spot The Ice Freezes And Creates No Motion Deseases....
I Got A Unique Stile With Tecniques That Brake Heads In Threads And Leaves Miles Of Death....
Been And Always Will Be King Of WordPlay Till The Sun Plays With The Moon Like Eclips And Stay There Slayed....
Magician Its Ready To Cap Souls And Strap Goals To Kids With No Future Or Goins Like Map Coals....
Cold Shivers My Whole Head When The Threads Told And Been Molded With Scriptures That Tips Hold....
Boiling The Fragments That My Thungue Once Pocesed! The Hot Flow In Extress That When I Spit It Press....
Been Taging Asses By Long And Everi Time I o Strong With Some Power That I Dont Know Where Is From....
Driping Blood In Import Massive And Closed Caskets My Heats Resting And Still Get Your Ass Ripped....
Got My Fingers Stuck To The Key Board, No Way Of Skaping This, Please Let Me Free Lord!....
Bolt Charges Distribute My Head In Magneton Tones, And The Flow Of The Rap Music Goes Troght My Skeleton Bones....

this was really nice.
your lines are too long, kills the flow a bit homey.
also, spell check your rhymes before you post, or at least do a basic look over, because misspelled shit makes it look bad. This wasn't a normal gankstuh rap, so it should be spelled properly, or at least coherantly.

Your metas are off the hook, as well as your similes. You know exactly what you're saying, and it shows through because this rhyme is full of determination. You have very nice internal rhyming. If you turned it into internal multies, you would be crazy good.
Just some advise, if you write with a topic, the rhymes come out with more meaning.

lol at having all those metas and finishing with "ass ripped"
great word dude
Peace

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