yo im tryin ta think but my brain is dusted/ i thought these niggaz was my friends but they all busted/ not to be trusted/but thats alright cuz i got one love and thats Jessica/ i wake up every morning in pain screaming fuck the rest of ya/ these tears/ are from all the years/ of pain and my one fear/ to grow up and be like my bitch dad/ it dont make me glad/ im on my knees askin GOD why im so angry and mad/ wantin to pull this gat and jus kill/ ya'll hatin on me but you dont kno the way i feel/ i'll steal/ from my friends jus ta have something i dont/ these demons pushin me to do somethin evil but i wont/ chillin with these fake niggaz/ so take triggaz/ and kill jiggaz/ so decest mothers/ please watch over these brothers/ even when they in pain/ sometimes i question if im sain/ i'v gottin through the rough turrain/ and through this rain/ im the realist nigga the rest of yall is plain/ im sceared cuz i killed a nigga , the evidence is a shirt witha bloodstain/ so when i speak listen/ cuz one day you gonna see some crazey shit or my gun blisten/ NIGGA

(chorus)
so GOD GOD GOD please watch my back/
when i pull the gat /
will ya'll niggaz ride/, by my side/ when i blast my Mak/
and hit the lac/
this shit is real/
the shit i feel/ when im angry and wanna kill/ so niggaz chill x2

yo yo yo i cant shake these demons runnin deep inside my vains/ if i dont get help soon i might go insain/and dont pass the nine cuz if i get caught im pillin/its like everytime i walk pass these bitch niggaz im killin/ i dont kno why im trippin its like im some kinda mid-evil vilain/come take a walk wit me deep inside this rain/ i cant keep killin these niggaz cuz all its bringin me is pain/ now say my name, the creepa/ the grim reapa/cuz when i come through ya'll bitches gonna catch a sleepa/ in ya reffa/ this bitch gave me an F so i killed my teacher/ Lord stop me before i do something stupid like kill my preacher/i stopped this game for awhile to try an be holy/ but everytime i turn around bitch made niggaz try to hold me/ IMMA LET YOU FAGGITS KNO YOU CANT CONTROL ME/ i cant stop thinking about the day my BOY DIED/ i remember it like it was yesterday we got high, he got shot and i cryed/ i remember when my girl use to call me on my phone/ i would tell her im hustlin baby and i wont be home/ and i kno it brung tears to her eyez/ im gettin fuckin phone calls of my demize/ but i wont stop, no i wont stop, im a man, so im goin for the prize/

(chorus)
so GOD GOD GOD please watch my back/
when i pull the gat /
will ya'll niggaz ride/, by my side/ when i blast my Mak/
and hit the lac/
this shit is real/
the shit i feel/ when im angry and wanna kill/ so niggaz chill x2 YALL NIGGAZ DONT FEEL MY PAIN. BUT I STILL HOLD ON CUZ ONE DAY GOD WILL STOP THE RAIN.NOMORE GOIN INSAIN, NOMORE BEIN PLAIN. NOMORE KILLIN AND NOMORE STEALIN GOD BLESS YOU ONE

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This was an aight drop

^ werd

Return da favour http://63.219.149.14/forum/showthre...&threadid=48317

iim checkin it out.....but....what favor

I mean return da favour i did too u ............I replied to ur drop........So return da favour and reply to my drop http://63.219.149.14/forum/showthre...&threadid=48317

yo i thought that shit was ill but they aint lettin me post so imma jus tell you from here

Stop lyin nigga

yo maybe when i git more use to this site and more post or what not we can do a "sick" collab you feel me

Reply to da mutha fuckin drop..........All u do is scroll and u will see a small box which says Your Reply.............Type in ur reply there

niga i aint stupid i been ta sites like this, and i already replyed, i had to look for tha thread to reply they wouldnt let me through that damn link so chill nigga.......damn..lol

they would say i wasnt logged in.......so dont git mad cuz i already replied

damn dude, you spammed your own thread...
this was an okay drop, not that good, but not terrible either. It had some cool wordplay with the demons and shit, but the topic was kinda played out.
try to organize your bars so that it's easier to read:
bar1/
bar2/
bar3/
etc....That was you can see the syllables and rhyme scheme better while your write it too.
Keep droppin, you'll improve
check my piece "the straw that broke the camel's back"
Peace

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