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Old 05-26-03, 11:28 AM   #1
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Short Verse I started to write to my girl

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First time I eva saw you , I knew you was mine. Aint no Ashanti but you always on time. I wanna grow old wit you, and live wit you, and if push comes to shove Im gonna die wit u. We meant to be togetha in any type weather. I remember that night I wrote that 10 page letter askin u fo forgiviness. I hate to relieve this. Put yo next boyfriends name up on my hit – list. This goes to you girl you is my whole world. Not havin notin in common was neva an issue, I am right now and I will always miss u, not bein able to kiss you, is a problem. I rather walk wit out a vest into *Harlem*
When our love collides it’s to make eachother cry, If I die than it wont be the same less u by side. Its like the life of 9 lives, forget the hate, rape, guns and knives.
Fo all my niggas on the block not knowin what to do, It’s like the remix - remake fo the Song Cry2


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Old 05-26-03, 11:34 AM   #2
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tht shits pretty deep im sure the ladies love it
do me a favor and give me some feed on my song to my gurl

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=50272
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Old 05-26-03, 11:49 AM   #3
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This was nice man. Had a nice flow to it. But the way you wrote it was ugly. Try to separate your lines with "//" or something, or hit enter after every line. It was nice none the less

Peep the link titled "Reflection of Fate" in my siggy.

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