still unfinished but gotta get criticised b4 i take any more steps


eyo,check this,im wreckless with sharp edges//
get wedges embedded within your chestbones//
as i wreck tones,infinite,im endin this,with a big bang//
you cant hang you too slow muthafucka//
grab ya grapple,then we can battle,on wheels and axels//
like sparticus,ridin thru the golden arches//
sparkin blunts,haze in the sky,like storm fronts//
i storm fronts, with armored core militia platoons//
smoothe like sasoon,leavin gashes like striped racoons//
im bout to be out but ill be back soon,to devistate//
with several blades,to put strain in many different ways//
on you impotent gays to get slain//
catch pain,or get drained lifeless//
my cycles strike skulls,bust heads open like lightbulbs//
find me on top of the eiffel,droppin anvils//
slam ya damn grille,with brass knuckles,you fucked kid//
head busted,im lustin to drain you bloodless//
lungin with rusty daggers half drunk//
just to show you faggets you cant fuck//
with B Newz,the main kid wreckin crews//
sendin all you fagget rappers ass backwards//
im disasterous,usin adverbs to slash ya wrist//
get the fuck way back,i smash kats solid//
no matter what game kids ima always stay ballin//
callin shots indefinite,im the head of this game//
fuck that im ahead of the class,smashin all of you wack kats//
so back down,before you get your ass hurt//
you could be the biggest pussy and still get your ass worked//


did that hurt? i bet it did,i said it did//
competitive to the core,takin kats to war//
you wont laugh no more,when i smash ya core//
cuz fagget ass rappers get they muthafuckin ass tore//


all you kats better hit the floor when im seen//
cuz i got a short fuse and its lit indeed//

dope shit and good ass vocab.. I really like this jam dog.. keep it up.. you just found yourself an admirer of your styles..

word? appreciate that kid. madd love.

u need more word play and more multies the only thing that was good was the vocab everthing els keep improveing kid

word. no doubt wordplay is lackin. but on the multi tip, i dont need em. wont use em. fuck em. but yeh this the pre audio roughdraft as explained. the final text will be dropped later this week hopefully.

was pretty ill shit dawg, gotta work on dat vocab, but this'd sound hott over a beat!

i dont put madd vocab in my audio shit... fucks the phlow.

You need to elevate................This Piece wasnt that Tight

i want u to tell me that when it hits audio.

uuuuuup.

up^

kicks tha shit outta what i've wrote thus far--

still learnin--

would appreciate any comments on my first & second open mic posts

Mystical Minstrel

Just another Madman

Honest opinion------

Thanx 4 showin what ta aim 4

peace