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05-27-03, 11:30 AM | #1 | |||
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Changing your ways.
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Changing Your Ways my name is alex johnson and i have a story to tell a story of life the heavens mostly a story from hell i dont know what compelled my actions or positons but i know the hell the dying and choking symptoms so perhaps its best to listen... damn i think sitting in my desk in a prison caught listening to thoughts...damn that girl is fucking hot feeling in my crotch i stare imagine that nice ass no temptation was stopped when the note passed "cindy its alex and i noticed your beautiful smile i noticed your eyes your light ive noticed for a while" its wild how her eyes lit with passion lust or love then mike "alex. no man. everyone knows cindy=slut look at the boys in this room . 50 % shes fucked and half of them probably had put it in the butt...." .."mike...so what" shes different shes beautiful its different with her. even if she has had a booty full invite i hope .lust fills my veins. i unfold the return note "meet me today 330 ..ps (parents wont be home) i looked at her...with a lustful stare...and mouthed "baby ill be there...." 3:30 came and eventually so did i it was paradise.. i was starin like your the greatest to fare the light baby i love you...innocent deadly words hit me.. this went on 2 months...then i got bored with cindy then i changed...in the halls not a woman could pass without me convincing them of giving me a chance.. a second glance or maybe some love at best... but the rant wasnt love..c'mon...it was about the sex fuck fuck fuck...all of them and then toss em out... so many that i soon lost the enormous count... i went up i went down ... in the name of love... and if you asked theyre names..i couldnt remember 1 this continued...i yearned for sex like a beast i never gave thought to the people that id seek until one came that thought i was different and special. sarah. the one that no matter what i was never regretful... it felt like love. i cared for her. i phoned her constantly i got her pregnant were we happy and were only 19. we had little ryan man he was the greatest to this day but when he turned one month. i tested + for AIDS not from sarah. from previously..i changed my ways! but god wants me to stay in deaths pretend little cage. so when ryan was just 2 months the start of his life.. i got sicker than ever..and eventually just died... now thats not all.... because i look back and realize i was an idiot dumbass fool... and AIDS was my death...but what really killed me is when i learned sarah and ryan were infected too.... "sometimes it doesnt even matter.... think about your actions"
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05-27-03, 11:47 AM | #2 | |||||||
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that shit is fuckin ill dawg.......
emotions run wild and shit....... feelin all of it man............ like the bit about........ "what really killed me was when i realised sarah and ryan had it too" fuckin dope shit dawg....... good piece......... enjoyed readin................ liked it dawg............. keep rhymin man........... check my shit with Rythmic Tendecies......... "Done With These Thugs" With Rythmic Tendecies Last edited by .:FiorZ:. : 05-27-03 at 11:55 AM. |
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05-27-03, 11:58 AM | #3 | |||
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thank you
checking it out now...
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05-27-03, 12:12 PM | #4 | ||||||
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ohh good rhyme sand,again im feelin git...i kow cats that have died from that shit so im feeling this....but its their own damn faults so i cant give no sadness to the matter....but thi sis madly written,as usual...i got crack pipes playin in the background,it almost goes with the beat...that beat is so ill..but yeah.it had great lines throughout it...meet me at 3:30 ps. parentsd wont be home...mouthign ill be there...ohh nice story telling...very well written.how long you sepend on your peices sand??anyways i gotta go...im still trying to work out the time differences for the states and australia,so i can post my topical league verse on time...mmmm.eh..anywya ...great verse sand,nicely done...good job yet again.
bismillah ohh return the favour some time... http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=50451 |
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05-27-03, 12:36 PM | #5 | |||
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i get them finished in like....
10 mins usually...i dont spend much time..but befor that i think forever bout how it ends...
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05-27-03, 06:39 PM | #6 | |||
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mad slept on...
damn. im going to lose...
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05-27-03, 06:44 PM | #7 | ||||
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sand.. this was dope.. seriously.. i like your writing, hope we meet up in the rbtl sooner or later
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05-27-03, 11:38 PM | #8 | ||||||
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Damn. You keep coming with them ill pieces man. This was deep, had great text in there, and concepts were amazingly stated inthe right times, Mr. Sandy. Also, you maintained a pretty even flow, stayed with a unique storyline, and made it end off with a deep, yet sad ending. Great tear jerker, for umm....other people, not me I swear!!
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05-27-03, 11:46 PM | #9 | |||||||
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awesome man
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05-27-03, 11:52 PM | #10 | |||
Sand
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nice reply
i got a lot from that
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05-28-03, 12:18 AM | #11 | ||||||
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these are ma faveroute drops, simplistic n deep, this shit was tight, i like how u stuck 2 yo guns, and the endin just blew me away, man all in 1 day i have read the best start n now the best endin on RB, sheit, i hope i dont meet u in RBTL... illest
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05-28-03, 09:32 AM | #12 | |||||||
BANNED For Being An Idiot
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it was nice but your madly overated
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05-28-03, 10:02 AM | #13 | |||||||
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05-28-03, 10:08 AM | #14 | ||||||
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Yo i enjoyed readin that peice dawg.respect
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05-28-03, 11:34 AM | #15 | |||||||
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yo, I was feelin' this.. sent a deep message to all them playas out there.. damn, I used to be like that too.. had a few scares over the years also.. seriously nice piece.. flow and shit were good too..
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