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06-06-03, 02:24 AM
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"The Mind At Work"
IP: 6236 079F
“The Mind At Work” My mind’s stuck in a moment I don’t understand… Can’t comprehend the meaning but thinking of what it stands… The mind is so complex that it stores all sorts of dialect… It’s just hidden , and still sittin’ there displaying indirect… Subliminal thoughts, hideous thoughts of ill criminal plots… Non-stop I crop at non-sense but manage to progress a-lot… I ascend levels to present several techniques that I speak… Indeed I breathe clean air but spare so much in my mind it just keeps… Comin’ to me, like a brain clog that just won’t leave… I was planted from a cynical seed, and now grown to an elite emcee… Fully bloomed, and everyone branching off of me like I am the tree… Holding everything together or maybe it just my mind playing tricks on me… It’s just that deceive-ing… Believe-in the words that are being spoken… This speech is being brought through my mind’s eye, there’s no provokin’… What is being said…You can try to stop it…But be forcefed… In the mind itself, there’s probably an uncountable amount of vital information… That or just useless garbage we call memories, some depressin’… I’m guessin’, we are supreme to other races, besides homosapiens… No knowledge greater than us, It must be we who puzzle the aliens… Instead of the other way round, the beautiful mind is bound to break down… At one point or another, like levels in a game, It just gets harder and harder… Farther and farther we reach into the universe, with each whole cycle… So with each step, what will my mind think? Will it rise or will it sink?... I just think…Look around and ask is it worth?...A peep at My Mind At Work… [syn] |
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06-09-03, 10:02 AM
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IP: 0840 D57D
Let me get some feedback.
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06-09-03, 10:09 AM
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Got More Meds Than Pfizer
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nice piece dawg, I liked the flow on this.. the vocab was pretty good, some a'ight metaphores.. I give it a 7/10.. 'cause I know you could do better... 1
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