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Old 06-12-03, 08:54 PM   #1
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soul on love... ( needs feed back)

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BABY PLS TRY TO KEEP UR THOUGHTS TOUGH, BUT LET UR LOVE BE ROUGH, BUT ONCE U HAVE SEEN THE LIGHT OF LOVE, LET THE RIVER "shyne" INSIDE OF U, U FLOW SO HIGH, MY WORDS ARE MORE HIGHER THEN ANY "mountain-peak", MY WISDOM IS MORE "highly-depthly-founded", THEN NO OTHER PHRASS OF THE
"poetical-world", WATCH THE ATMOSPHERE ENERGY AROUND U FLOW SO EASY, BUT QUITE, I LURK IN THE TIGHT STREETS WATCHIN U FROM A WINDOW UPON THE ALIY-WAY STREETS, SENDIN A "RING" DOWN MY SPINE, EACH TIME I RING UR
"phone-line", I WONDER IS SHE GONNA PICK UP, OR WILL I HAVE TO JUST "suck-it-up?"
I LEAVE MY MIND BEHIND, LETTING THE VEINS "re-surface" TO THE BRAIN,I TRY TO OBTAIN THE HINTS NEXTS TO THE CLUES WHICH MAKES ME GET THE "blues", I EVEN TRAIN MY SPIRIT JUT TO RELAX, BUT THIS "justice" I SPEAK ABOUT, IS IT JUST
THE THESUS OF ONE WAY OUT OF LOVE OR INTO LOVE?
I STICK AROUND WITH THE "shoulders-down", I STICK TO MY OWN BUSINESS LETTING U BABY FEEL THE DIFFERENT "public-bodies" SURROUND U, IM AT THE ENDS OF MY PATH, I HAD TO DO THE MATH TO GET WHERE I AM NOW, BUT I ASK MYSELF "how" COULD A MAN LIKE MYSELF STEP UP THE "leadder" TO THE NEXT LEVEL OF "love", I SPEAK THE TRUTH ABOUT HOW CLOSE IT WAS TO MY DEATH, BUT THIS PLANET "earth" I WAS BORN UPON I'LL NEVER LET THE "rebirth" OF THIS GURL WHO I WONDER ABOUT, ALL THROUGH-OUT MY LIFE I WAS JUST PLAY'D TO THE END LIKE A "tape", PEOPLE THINKING THEY CAN USE ME FOR MY GENEROSITY OF "the" MONEY, I WOULD SPEND A "bill" ON THEM NEXT MINUET I KNOW THERE ON THE "pill", MY BODY HAD "chills", BUT THIS TIME MY MIND WAS ALREADY SETUP AS A "chok-board", STRAIGH-FARD, I HAD ONE THING IN MY LIFE TO LOOK UPON, THIS GURL NAMED "linds" U MAKE MY DREAMS SO CREAMY LIKE U AND I WERE WRAPPED UP LIKE A "mummy", LAYIN IN "CAOUGHAGUES",
GIVING U THE SOFTEST KISS, BUT MOST OF ALL I KNOW I AM WITH THE ONE I WOULD I WANT TO DIE WITH, I WOULD LOVE TO GIVE BIRTH TO A "new-reborn" WITH THE LETTERS OF UR "name" STARTIN' OFF HER NAME, I CANT BARE "linds" TO BE WITH OUT U , U COMPLETE MY SOUL AND MY HEART, IF U WERE TO DEPART AWAY FROM ME I'D PRAY EVERY-DAY OF MAY, WHICH I'D BE IN "sadness", "lonlyness" FROM THE FACT OF U LEAVEN MY HEART ONCE AGAIN U SAID "u'd be mine" BUT NOW I HAVE THE FEELINGS U WANT ME NOW, HUN I CANT EXPRESS THE WAY I'D SEND U A NOTE BY "ed'x-exspress", THIS FEELIN I GOT FROM U TONIGHT, MADE MY SIGHT MORE TIGHT AND SHARPER, FROM "reality" TO A "comic" BOOK, I THINK I SHOOK THE "heavens" ABOVE MY HOUSE, BUT THEN AGAIN I LACK THE ADVERSITY OF WALKIN-HOLDIN UR HAND STANDING SIDE-BY-SIDE U TAKIN THE "queen" THRONE ME TAKIN THE "king" THRONE
ITS LIKE WE ARE GETTIN MARRED BUT THATS FAR FROM "satan"..
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Old 06-13-03, 02:51 AM   #2
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It was a little tough to read but I liked it...........the only thing i could say that wasn't that great was the way it was set up but thats on you.........keep droppin'
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Old 06-13-03, 03:09 AM   #3
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Yeah it wasn't bad. The way you typed it up was really annoying to read though. All caps then quotes on certain words. What's that supposed to be doing anyways?

Parts of it I had trouble keeping my attention on it and other parts were hard to follow. Not bad writing..keep posting.
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Old 06-13-03, 04:19 PM   #4
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thanks till up ..
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Old 06-16-03, 10:17 PM   #5
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come on more uppin
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Old 06-17-03, 12:24 AM   #6
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That was tight......I like how it had feeling....but was alittle irritating to read, but keep doin your thing Homie....Fo Sho!
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