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Old 06-09-03, 10:21 PM   #1
Accelerate
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It'Z Not A Fucking Game:A B.R.E Production

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i'm tired of the beef...
im tired of all this shit....
it's time to let niggas learn...
lemme end this quick....

Look, redragon its fate that you had to come play real quick bitch/
look at this nigga, when i look i start to twitch/
not in the way that he really scares me/
but the way he step up, when he know iv'e gone crazy/

This mental state cannot take no bitches on my side/
u was in then you left,beefed, and when you done its back to dick-ride/
fuckin pussy, i eat shit like this on a daily basis/
slayin this dragon,like the k.k.k as some racist/


And who the fuck is I.M, fuck it, its time for killin ya/
call the cops bitch, because you can't your instant messenger/
fuck this nigga up, cuz he ain't been here as long as me/
hes a blind ass newbie, but its time we let him see/
im gonna fuck you up, this shit just go on keep gettin ill/
red-rb.com blue-leave, should'a been smacked for pickin the red
pill/
but shit like that don't make me compete how you use the hand-skills/
because i heard about pussy, but i never knew that dick kills/


this is the last diss, i feel im ever gonna post/
cuz both these niggas i just killed,wuz a joke/
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Old 06-09-03, 10:27 PM   #2
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Flow was off from the get-go, multi's seemed forced to me ' gonna post' 'wuz a joke' you need to elevate those man, get some real multi syllable use. Work on your flow a bit, the uneven bars sacrificed the flow, made it seem elementary rhyming to me, you could of therown more punches or added some wordplay to hold the readers attention a little more, but you'll learn more about that as you elevate i guess.

Peace!

Oh, and reply to my drop "Tell A Vision" lol. .
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Old 06-09-03, 10:32 PM   #3
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yo thanks im appreciatin, the help
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Old 06-27-03, 04:08 AM   #4
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I should have known this was going to be wack.This is cat is in B.R.E....naw just kidding,you could have worked on the hook a little bit more....oh,I'm not saying this was good.This was still wack ass hell.lol
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