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Old 06-21-03, 07:47 PM   #1
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Its A world Of non fiction

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Time to get away from the decay left behind like a pup in petco.
Days pass in the ghetto, all alone somehow I cant let go.
Like Eggo I am waffled in between education and a job..
Get caught in between two linebackers from a lob pass..
Quarterbacks is like the white elites, always itching like da...
Fungus on my feet.. Come real neat like gansta pants nicely .
creased.. No grease on this balled head, cuz i got enough led
to start a revolution with a bloodshed.. Get scared next to a horses head in ya bed.. The Living dead is the minority with
a price on their head.. Get shot dead by our own peeps dat
have been misled by the muthafucking government spreading
their propaganda from they nest.. Its a drug fest for da rest
of this nation runned by the cockasian, raisin in da sun get
burned from the gun popped, now on the run ya get caught up..
Bodies drop in this world of non fiction..Last chance to survive..
Make a quick decision..We all gonna suffer from the premonition
But who gives a fuck since this life is just non fiction..
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Old 06-22-03, 01:51 AM   #2
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Some Lines were Nice , But some were Weak , This Piece would be better if it was Longer , Keep spitting
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Old 06-22-03, 03:30 AM   #3
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^^^ pretty much what he said. u need to elevate a bit more and make em a little longer. Other than that it was great.. Keep it up
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Old 06-22-03, 03:57 AM   #4
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it wasnt too bad, but a bit of a work and it would be better. you gotta work on your structure and flow. you cant have lines of different lengths following on from each other.
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