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Old 06-23-03, 06:21 PM   #1
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Unhappy dismemberment

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the wind burns, retribution howls for thoseself
DisMembered for no more or less that portrays bloody mess
revenge rings your words desire to be heartfelt
if so, why dont you use those finger tips to rip it out my chest

lost to no fate my make be completly mistery
like much ago same desires was to take a stand, so bold
if words mark our lives, war was waged: furiously
the king of heart of fires constant beatings left me so cold

time now walks, unsatisfied it hunts for a kill
no need to prepare battle sum set ups exist to end silent wars
still take a stand without metaphors to shield
if the day appears and i fade your still there baring the scars

DisMembered a pen put in my mouth to write
his wondering if a X in writing could be simply reached if it did
thinking for a last spit there'd be no more life
against all odds its terrifying worst left me DisMemebered as is
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Old 06-24-03, 03:11 PM   #2
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Old 06-24-03, 03:25 PM   #5
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dhjrjrjreujeurjurdu5i5ijrtjktureyhioerye5jhyehyioe rjhyerjyewrjhyioewijyerjyhjeyjiewjyheryjhiyjh8458y 86uietjy845u8yjsdpij45uyj4y5

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Like most other's before me. MY penis is small, so this is how i compensate...sad i know. But hey, it's the internet....

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Old 06-24-03, 04:09 PM   #6
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Old 06-24-03, 08:57 PM   #7
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Though at times akward and at times a bit here and there..

it was still a piece of real intrigue.

It had a slightly surreal feel to it. I don't know why, i mean i guess it could be cos i didn't dig into it too much. Instead just reading it as it is. The words and the imagery that went with it...

...i got some ideas to what it meant. But would you care to tell??

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Old 06-25-03, 02:43 AM   #8
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dhjrjrjreujeurjurdu5i5ijrtjktureyhioerye5jhyehyioe rjhyerjyewrjhyioewijyerjyhjeyjiewjyheryjhiyjh8458y 86uietjy845u8yjsdpij45uyj4y5

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Like most other's before me. MY penis is small, so this is how i compensate...sad i know. But hey, it's the internet....

lmao
thanx for the reply
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Old 06-25-03, 05:15 AM   #9
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um i got a feeling of anger and neglect of a person out of this piece. would u care to explain what it means? it doesnt really make sense. if a poem is complex one should still be able to pull a meaning from the piece. it seemed too mysterious, sorry but that's how i saw it.

could u peep some of my poems, thanks
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