Who'd have known that drug lords feelings are so sensitive?//
All I did was tell him that a small order of weed wasn't so imperative//
His face got red and his kunckles began to turn white//
I saw the danger just in time and in fright I ran into the night//
Hours later there were already rumors i was dead//
The lord was so engraged he put a price on my head//
Ember glares burn into my spine as I weep to myself mentally//
I think about my baby and my girl about how much they meant to me//
Creeping down shady looking streets and side alley ways//
Im watching my back making sure to avoid the gang banger gaze//
I can almost feel the cross hair as they graze acorss my spine//
The silk of my coffin glance my face as I come near my time//
The shadow becomes my friend, but it becomes my enemy//
A place to reconcile but a place where a bullet waits for me//
A red hot bitch that can rip through my soul and my heart//
The kind of thing that can split a scalp and give new meaning to "hair part"//
Streetlights are a sign saying "stay Away" as I creep along//
Every listening for that gun shot, aka the Sniper's Song//
Was that movement, no, now im getting paranoid//
In everything lurks my death, something else to avoid//
My friends and family are nonexistent, I am fending for myself//
Fuck fame and wealth...im stuck fending for me, pride up on the shelf//
A jungle of pavement, dumpsters and buildings my place to hide//
The only place where I can have some safety as I cry inside//
I creep up the street, breathing with baited breath//
There the lord was, muzzle glinting, in his eyes were my death

A bit on and off....


...but overall the emotions that at times were bursting came through enough to add an 'up and down' power to it..

...At times the rhyme scene was stuck to a bit too rigidly...but it came out well in the end...

..resp...

Shiznit's THoughts:

Cant be bad at all...but the fact that it was structured quite weird...it was well stood out at some points

...can work at the rhyme scheme at the line breaks i mean some were off but for some reason u could like understand that you put those in for a purpose...

It was quite an alright piece...not much in it but it sure does fun to read this

i wanna read more...so yeah!

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