wait...what? i thought you said...."forever"...
umm....okay, umm....we'll talk later? when you
get back? okay....umm...i love you, bye....

Bitches playing with feelings, think that love is just a big game
Not knowing that it's the guys that lose, to them it's all the same
How many tears I have shed, is a question above comprehension
Knowing I'll always come back, your able to leave my emotions in suspension
I fucking love you, how hard is it for you to see
Everytime I look into your eyes, all I can see is you loving me
But it seems you don't even care, to you it's all in fun
Fuck these bitches all in here, I wish I could say I was done...
but for some, reason i'm believin' it can turn out like a dream
cuz' inside, i need it to reason that i should even be a being
living is that thing, it feeds off love, you can see in the dark
paid at every one, how many more fucking tolls you your heart
see i was sold from the start, you pulled me in like a rope
then i layed myself out for you, and you crushed all my hope
this is what i know, no matter what, i fucking love you
but with him do you choke?... on your words, bitch fuck you!
What's in the past is in the past, you need to forget about your ex
Telling me you missed him so, didn't take to long to forget about me I bet
Telling me I'm the one you love, but girl it's an empty promise
All the guys you trying to be with, it feels like global conquest
Time I spent loving you, feels like a waste of time right now
You've put on a magnificent show, hey bitch why don't you take a bow
I should of known what was going on right from the fucking start
It feels like a game of Hackey Sack, the way you kick around my heart
just like a bitch, you came and made your mark, i hate it
fucked from the start, i'm lost. expected to be complacent
i'm ragin', suit yourself for a goodtime, did you fuck other guys
your feelings were tripped, and your now heart is full of lies
i pull the wires, i'm shocked you could even think, yet do this
should i even speak? we found true love, and your content to lose it
can't forget, i found her in the rye, and she cuddled for a minute
and we went through a lot of shit, but when the oppurtunities arise....


she left my ass in it...



She: I'm ready to come back I can't stand being away from you anymore
Me: Sorry bitch, but this is the end, I don't want to be stuck in your rotating door

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how true this is...I like it...keep droppin' gemz like this dunny

Thanks for the reply

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Well i been lookin at other rappers work and tellin em how 2 improve but i reeely related to this as i went thru same thing recently so i cant tell u 2 improve it cos its PERFEC lol

oh actually 1 thing stop sayn fuckin love you lol you scarin the gurl but props this IS hot
(and this IS NOT a d.r feedback)

... but i would still like u 2 return the favour

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=63749

^^What soldier said^^

your an idiot. 2 people were in involved
and thug wyte. you should be like metallica..






































band

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orchestrated in a late night, OverCast forum get-together? Cool piece. . Hits hard @ home w/ most, I'm sure.

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lol How did you know... Yep, right before we went to bed, about 20 minutes all together.

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Nice piece i wus feelin the contend sick drop YO

peep mine

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=63738

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Shiznit's Thoughts:

WOW!...very very very touching piece..i would even wanna hear it on audio....


VOCABULARY

>not too much but u used intellectual words that made this verse unique...those words like "rotating door", "global conquest", "complacent"....those just made the vocabs soo intense...nicely done!


FLOW

>definitely perfect...like i said..i definitely wanna hear it on audio cuz when i was readin it im kinda like thinking of how would the beat go and everything and its quite good...i mean like every word perfectly fits every beat....simple as that...


WORDPLAY

>good imagery and metas...like the "HOckey Sack"...that was really good...hmm...some words just came out emotionally strong...tight!


CONTENT

>feelin it ....ahhhhhh absolutely...it was like some kind of hypnotism that those words would actually make u think of people and the whole world mentality nowadays...the emotions were definitely refracted somethings that made this piece really interesting and intriguing to read....

OVERALL

>madd good piece...i loved it!

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