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IP: AA0A 32A7
I've been called an asshole, even a prick
i keep it all in, gettin real ticked don't know what i did to deserve this shit always lookin at wrist, debating whether to slit knife in hand, all set got a plan write a note, hoping they'll understand DEAR PARENTS, i want you to know that i love you and what i'm about to do, has nothing to do with you i'm just fed up with my life so i decided to pick up a knife i don't want you to cry, just because i've died it was my choice, to commit suicide i never told you about what was going on i was trying to be like dad, tryin to be strong and bro, don't ever forget the times we had some were good, and some were bad don't worry about me, i'll be watchin you from above don't ever forget, all my love but now it's time to do something crazy i'll never forget you, love Jamie yeh this has nothing to do with me, i was just think about all the shit that goes on in school and shit, ya know bullies and all the shit but yeh, up this shit Last edited by Krem : 07-08-03 at 01:52 PM. |
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IP: E7E2 6F94
don't sleep
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IP: E7E2 6F94
come on people
up this |
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IP: 19EE F2A1
can't sleep if you have insomnia like me, the suicide note idea was good, the rhymes didn't interfere with the message or lines at all, this hit close to home, cuz I had to talk a friend of mine out of suicide, keep up the good work
peace
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IP: E7E2 6F94
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Yeah. This was raw and strong in emotions.
I felt you went over certain cliches too much though. It seemed a bit over done to me. But the emotions were there. and they did come out... ..resp.. |
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