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IP: 4F2B 4EA2
Cubic expression
Falls flat Square arises How ironic What I mean? Get your shovels Aint too hard Let yourself go Sink or float Imagination may help... Simplicity merely hidden Though complexity too.. Both are seperate Or fused together.. Open to all To see fit... Abstract visions Churned through minds Rose fields? Blatant yet beautiful Crescent moon? With stars too.. Cloudy days? I'm in awe.. Do you see? Of course, no.. Though maybe slightly.. Gah! who knows.. I'll keep on throwing How many will you catch? For that matter, will you feel? Feel in the form of varying breezes... Turn the spectrum one more time.. Layers within all even and straight? Amount limited to fit the norm? Swimming too deep are we not? Well relating to what is being said... Back to basics in my message.. Let this question echoe with answers... Number of squares to make this cube? Wait, to put it better... Number of squares to make cube?* Heh, i really do hope someone get's that. The heh if someone get's it all. |
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aiight....i'ma take a swing at this...i'm guessing that this piece is about abstract verses normal....the cube representing abstract and the square representing the normal....i'm not gonna try going too much deeper then that, i might go crosseyed or something...lol...
But from what i got out of it, i liked it a lot...maybe my interpretation was completely wrong but nevertheless i enjoyed reading it...i thought that the questioning theme fit really well...and as always all other aspects were on point... Peace |
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hhhhmmmm.....
I also liked the questioning theme this had...i think that added to the mystery ebhind the piece...this was quite abstract and complex,though im sure once the meaning is said(if it is said) everything will become clear...i liked how it was confusing but still kind of simple at the same time...ya kno i probably am completely off with this but this reminded me of looking through a kaleidoscope ahaha....i mean for some reason when i read this i was like wow it seems like that, but, im sure its not, though that would make an interesting subject for a piece....anyways i liked the form the expression and the mystery of it...nice much luv 1 |
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You got a bit of it Recca. I appreciate that.
And remember people, no hate towards anyone with this piece. Actually, that ^^^ should give a clue to what it is. comments appreciated mis-tique. ..resp... |
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you freakin MOD's are so good at this, no wonder you're MOD's. i agree with recca, the cube=abstract square=normal, but also you put together everyones "normalcy" to get something extraordinary, a cube. Or maybe you just mean someone named cube. there are six sides to a cube, so six squares. I'm rambling so I better stop, nice drop.
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Nah, it aint about somone named cube!..
Appreciate you digging though... ...resp.. |
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Hmm..i'm not gonna act like i know what you meant..but i'll tell you what got out of it...(kinda reminded me of thinking outside the box..but ne wayz)... Abstract visions
Churned through minds Rose fields? Blatant yet beautiful Crescent moon? With stars too.. Cloudy days? I'm in awe.. those lines..they kinda reminded me..of peoples views...there ispirations....like how they view things...and then it gave me an idea...of how..if people had not viewed things in there head..(had dreams)..half the world would not be where it is right now like i said..thats what i got out of it...i'm not going to try to dig what u meant...<<<<<<is blonde gets confused easily<<< A poet always understands ones work better than anyone else...so its okay if some do not get the meaning |
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Oh, for sure. I most definetly appreciate people getting meanings other than the primary one i place into the piece. That's for certain sure.
This aint me hating on anyone. Just some constructive criticism to some people through a vent. I didn't mean to imply to anyone that there is no meaning other than the primary one. Just that if someone got that one, then it'd be appreciated. Most definetly appreciated lady trinity (i see you got your account active again..)... ..resp.. |
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yea..thanx..i did...hmm..constructive criticism....i'll take any anyday..poetry is something i've always taken seriously..even back in the day...when i think me and you first started off together...and now ur higher than me..*tear*..lol...jp
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a second swing....or adding to my original guess...i'm sticking with the cube representing abstract and the square representing ordinary...but i think the meaning behind this piece was to tell, or suggest rather, that people be more abstract with their pieces and their way of thought...that they need to widen their horizon maybe, and go beyond the everyday styles that tend to be getting a lil played...in critiquing other pieces as well as writing their own.........this didnt really dawn on me until i read it like a 4th time....
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Ms Trinity - i've been relatively crap since the 'great blockage'...which was before i came on here.
But yeah, you got a real way to put things so well with simplicity. Not taking away the depth from the piece. That's an art within itself. Most def. Recca - You've virtually got it. Actually, you have got it in a way. Just that it was aimed more so at the reader rather than the writer. Ya dig? So you can work the last part out now too. Kind of sarcastic and patronising, but that's just satire more than me being serious in my 'higher than thou' stance i took at times with his piece. Sorry if it seemed like that, but hey, that's one of the points of the piece, and helps force the overall meaning through. And anyway, it's a bloody vent!! Anyway, appreciated how you dug into this piece. That's one of the primary reasons i drop pieces. So other people can dig what i dug..(??!!)... ..resp... |
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Wow i been had respect for u since a ways back and i like this piece, i dont wnna guess the meaning because as it was sed u understand ya shit more then other people i like the versatility of this verse how so many dif people have different views its thought provoking yet simple as was sed earlier, instant respect, 1luv.
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Im new here varenteo and i really like your work..im feeling your style..its clever....and i belive thats why your probobaly the best here....you respect ideas good or bad....thats cool...defintely respect your writing and personality...looking forward to some of your work
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^^No doubt.
Comments appreciated from both...good or bad... ...resp... |
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