umm i freestyled a poem but i dont really like it so i just cut it down to a few lines just wanted reassurance...

twist and flip in my fingers heaven and hell spit scikles let em spill well~
this evanscent life i hear ringing sirenes instead of a bell~
done sparring wit the almighty shadow boxing my soul in a hole of eternity~
eternally perturbing and disturbing the wording thats burning me~
have a acidic sip of caustic visions trapped in a hell unfit for a prophet to live in~
my livid flowing methodic thoughts hold the truth like the apple adam had bitten~
My emersive verses submerges under the pain of loss~
and smashes your distractions and actions from crashin your train of thought~

umm feedback? 1luv.