this is my intro piece for y'all who dont know me, gimme some feedback, im new

Alias is gzus, no relation to christ,
nameless as he is, y’all cant believe the hype/
everyones heard the stories of his magic and might/
tragic that what he made in 7 days, we destroyed overnight/
but to me that just a tale, a fantasy for the weak/,
a cruel joke created to easily control the meak/
im the only god here, my power being lyrical/
every word i spit can be considered a miracle/
I’ll make my own legacy, instead of revering/
and know im alone, when the end is nearing/

Man, ur ryhmes r good, and all...but the u bein' God part is shi'. Some o' da big rappers r hard core Christains, such as DMX. Don' get me wrong, now, ur shi' is pretty good...but maybe a different topic would help ya...

Hope ya don' have beef...jus' bein' honest dawg, and thats what ya want'...righ'?

Yo those were pretty dope still. Not sure if wanted to be blasphemous or not but i like that point of view. You're comin from an angle alot of people wont dare to come from or dare speak of. Thats dope though going places were most people wouldnt. I thought it was a bit short but still pretty dope. And yo U reppin Canada, Bigg Ups ta that. PEACE

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thnx for honesty, thats all ppl need

and as for blasphemy, its jus what i believe, like ppl believe in the bible or kurahn......meh, i'll explain more in some other writtens i got


thnx for feedback though, helps me wanna elavate!

This Was A Dpe Piece Dawg, A Little Controversial Topic, But Anyway:

I Think Your Been Rappin' SomeWhere Else Been Rapping For A While. You Had Good Solid lines, Nice Rhyming:
"tragic that what he made in 7 days, we destroyed overnight/" - That Was a Killa Line!

The Flow Here Was Smooth, Never Fell Of Once. You had Mad Imagry And Wordplay Here:

Overall: Although It Was Not Very Long, 7/10, Keep Improvin, Add Some Multi's Here And There!

thnx for the feedback, every site where i drop dis as my intro ppl tell me i need to extend it, so ima make it longer, maybe get a chorus, get a dope beat and make it my debut song..........

feedback = elavation

was tight piece i wanna read the full spit when its done, fuck um all spit what ya feel keep it reel

ya i think ima extend it a bit, remove the weak/meak part, introduce somthin other than that.......i got ideas, but i dont wan beef wit the religoius peeps

I like this piece but I agree that it's short...I don't really have a religion now...been god-body been Christian...ya know I got my own beliefs that y'all mufuckaz might be blessed with through rhyme sometime in the near future...

well i guess i gotta extend it..........