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07-10-03, 09:37 PM
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Don't know what to call this...
IP: 506B 83BA
A dreamless wonder un which you cannot wake up.
Turning to new inspirations but it is the sand that you love. Images of deep tall waves overwhelmed at the edge. So ready to make a change but have nothing to be said. Thunderous noise and all you do is turn. To another emptyness that has nothing to be learned. You are so big yet to the cliff but an ant. Want to make a differance but sing the same unharmonius chant. Breathless by the screams un heard of. Want to be first yet do not push and shove. Ready to jump into something new. Yet sit back from the chaos and enjoy the view. |
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07-10-03, 09:50 PM
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IP: 0100 305B
Real poem Trinity...I like how you summed up what you wanted to say in not too many words..Your images gives me a descriptive view in my head of what your sayin...Overall I was feeling it...And I enjoy reading your posts...
One ShorteRoc |
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07-13-03, 08:51 PM
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uppin..jeez
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07-14-03, 01:46 PM
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WOW!!! short but power full ma
i enjoyed this piece and the tittle it could be is Dreams....cuz i read it twice....and shit kept me thinkin about unseemed reality.......But Nice drop and eys ruthy is bac..lol
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07-15-03, 06:07 PM
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aight thanx papi
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07-15-03, 07:12 PM
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very nice...i enjoyed reading it although it wasnt very long...however u more then made up for the length...definately shows how a lot of people talk about wanting things but never make any actions towards getting them....
LP |
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07-17-03, 08:37 PM
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Tampons are expensive
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IP: EF0A E7B2
Shiznit's Thoughts:
brilliant....the simplicity and the over all content reflected its greatness. the terms use were accurate with the whole thing and on board with the flow...very smooth...not that long but either way its good its hard to think of what to call ur pieces huh?...hahha same thing for me..i always think of a perfect one and i thought one thing and another....its ridiculous so i ended up calling my poems worst..hehehe nice job
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07-18-03, 12:08 AM
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agreed i've read this a few times but could never really think of how i wanted to say how i felt but this shows it well i dont really have the same namnig prob but i really liked how beatifully ur emotions shone thru on this piece, 1luv. |
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07-21-03, 08:52 PM
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IP: 84B7 08E9
The way you put it all together in such a 'wavey' emotional like way, was very good.
It was one of 'those' pieces which one doesn't feel critique would go well with. The meaning i got out of it was either a man who doesn't want to take risks. Experiencegreat things He's content with what he has. And see's thing simply. Though it is all there for him to do. Or Someone who joined the army. .resp... |
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07-30-03, 01:24 PM
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IP: D251 FCF5
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-------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Originally posted by shiznit Shiznit's Thoughts: brilliant....the simplicity and the over all content reflected its greatness. the terms use were accurate with the whole thing and on board with the flow...very smooth...not that long but either way its good its hard to think of what to call ur pieces huh?...hahha same thing for me..i always think of a perfect one and i thought one thing and another....its ridiculous so i ended up calling my poems worst..hehehe nice job -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- agreed i've read this a few times but could never really think of how i wanted to say how i felt but this shows it well i dont really have the same namnig prob but i really liked how beatifully ur emotions shone thru on this piece, 1luv. couldnt put it ne better keep spittin |
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