Tell me what yall think:



When the minds of one and many are in agreemant,
A leader is born,

When the minds of one and many are in conflict,
A leader is scorned,

When the minds of many and many are in concordance,
An Allience is formed,

When the minds of many and many are in throes,
A nation is torn,

Consequences good or bad stem from all actions,
May the peoples minds be warned




Holla back atcha Sicilian boi from da dirty south, who's attemptin to bring back the Roman Empire!!!

I like it...I think its good......

peAce

haha fellow Warlord member up in hurra!! wut up Twizted, she reppin those Ill Seductions! damn, and she from Texas like me. Aint nobody got pride like da dirty south peeps, and the Texans got the most of all


keep the comments comin yall, lets try an get some detailed ones aight, peace!

Shiznit's Thoughts:

Alright...here goes my constructive critism...hehe

The way u structured this piece was brilliant!...The chosen words actually showed that its meaning was indeed great...

When i read this ..i was thinking of something like the Medieval Ages...somewhere along knights and kings and warriors and stuff like that...lol

The flow fits perfectly. U used bar by bar rhyme scheme. it was good but the fact that it was short somehow made me think that it lacked something.

Whole content of it was pretty much interesting...but you left me hanging at the end and i know that u couldve make the ending even better. The truth is..if you couldve put this and recreate it or prolly add more a bit of interesting stuff in it like i mean getting in depth with the whole battle thing..that would be awesome. I like some more action..but either way...this one was good..


i liked it..

P.S.

hmm...wanna try dropping something on Rhetorical Insights??..what u gotta lose??? NONE. hehehe.. thanks!

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and this piece was not supposed to be descriptive or even about war. Its just a simple piece saying that everything has consequences, and it basically blankets the tendencies of the political world in the physical.

Simple, strong with a point that was half hidden. Also short, but you said what you wanted to say. I dunno, i just don't feel i should provide criticism on this piece. It was what it was.

Roman Empire? Well i have first tabs on Caeser. Though according to Ras Kass, he was every womans husband and every man's wife..

...though the will of one man...

..resp...