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Old 08-02-03, 04:16 AM   #1
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life my-style

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Take a trip into my relam, into my reality breifly
Drop a tab and be glad you fucked completly
Its wild and crazy, my life's fulla dayz that hazy
Never mild yet I remain lazy..
Tit on my ass as the government payz me
Dont fuck with guns unless duty calls
Wear all colors.. sept white..
Skin color clashes with shirt, Im Albino
My rhymes are poient, like white rhino
If you know... then you know..
If you dont.. then grab a bong
And try to follow along
Grab a Nug, throw it in a shot glass
Grab some clips, and chop it fast
Once its diced.. pile green into the bowl
Take one toke.. take two.. 3..naw dont hold
pass.. ''puff puff pass'' dont cut out thoes who last





ok.. it doesnt go wit tha title really
coment or dont.. i felt like uppin post count..
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Old 08-02-03, 07:23 AM   #2
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You force your mutli's spread them out a bit..peace
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Old 08-02-03, 09:39 AM   #3
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^^ Word...Plus Your Flow Was So Off.....Try To Stay Wit It, You Fell Off Way To Much...
You Had Some Good Multis, But So Easily Pushed. Damn Kid. I Dunno, I Acutally Think This Is Whack As Hell...

Overall- 5/10

Up Yo Vocab...Spread The Multis...Find A Decent Flow...
Its All Good Afta That Playa
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Old 08-02-03, 09:52 AM   #4
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Rhyming/Flow
MUlti's Were Crushed Togther, You Need To Spread Them Out, INstead Of Pushing Them All into a Few Bars! The Multi's You Did Have Were O.k, But Could Have Been Better....5/10

Vocab/Wordplay
NOt MUch Vocab here, You Really Need To Complexiate It, Mos Def. REad A Dictionary Or Something...Work On Wordplay Too:...2/10

Concept/Topic
This Is A PLayed Topic, Why Make a Title, But Keep Walking Away From It?, Confusing To me...0/10

Overall
4/10, You Need Help To elevate, Up Your Flow, Vocab , Everything Nearly...

Word!
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Old 08-02-03, 04:27 PM   #5
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that was weak man. It was mad corny
I Acutally Think This Is Whack As Hell... SLIK was right here
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Old 08-03-03, 12:49 AM   #6
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lol.


k-thx
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