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08-02-03, 04:16 AM | #1 | ||||||
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life my-style
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Take a trip into my relam, into my reality breifly Drop a tab and be glad you fucked completly Its wild and crazy, my life's fulla dayz that hazy Never mild yet I remain lazy.. Tit on my ass as the government payz me Dont fuck with guns unless duty calls Wear all colors.. sept white.. Skin color clashes with shirt, Im Albino My rhymes are poient, like white rhino If you know... then you know.. If you dont.. then grab a bong And try to follow along Grab a Nug, throw it in a shot glass Grab some clips, and chop it fast Once its diced.. pile green into the bowl Take one toke.. take two.. 3..naw dont hold pass.. ''puff puff pass'' dont cut out thoes who last ok.. it doesnt go wit tha title really coment or dont.. i felt like uppin post count.. |
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08-02-03, 07:23 AM | #2 | ||||||
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You force your mutli's spread them out a bit..peace
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08-02-03, 09:39 AM | #3 | ||||||
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^^ Word...Plus Your Flow Was So Off.....Try To Stay Wit It, You Fell Off Way To Much...
You Had Some Good Multis, But So Easily Pushed. Damn Kid. I Dunno, I Acutally Think This Is Whack As Hell... Overall- 5/10 Up Yo Vocab...Spread The Multis...Find A Decent Flow... Its All Good Afta That Playa |
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08-02-03, 09:52 AM | #4 | ||||||
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Rhyming/Flow
MUlti's Were Crushed Togther, You Need To Spread Them Out, INstead Of Pushing Them All into a Few Bars! The Multi's You Did Have Were O.k, But Could Have Been Better....5/10 Vocab/Wordplay NOt MUch Vocab here, You Really Need To Complexiate It, Mos Def. REad A Dictionary Or Something...Work On Wordplay Too:...2/10 Concept/Topic This Is A PLayed Topic, Why Make a Title, But Keep Walking Away From It?, Confusing To me...0/10 Overall 4/10, You Need Help To elevate, Up Your Flow, Vocab , Everything Nearly... Word! |
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08-02-03, 04:27 PM | #5 | ||||||
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that was weak man. It was mad corny
I Acutally Think This Is Whack As Hell... SLIK was right here |
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08-03-03, 12:49 AM | #6 | ||||||
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lol.
k-thx |
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