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Old 07-25-03, 07:57 PM   #1
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What you gonna do....unfinished

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HOOK

What are you gonna do
The choice is up to you
What are you gonna do
Whats gonna be your new excuse


Am a driving you crazy yet
Are you gonna hit me yet
Ama making you sweat
Is the pressure to much yet
You want me to start countin the times you’ve crept
Is the anger risin yet
Have a hit a nerve yet
Is the fist clenchin yet
Are you squarin up ma face yet
Planning on how to hide the body yet
Thought bout what your lies are yet
Thought bout how your gonna cover it up yet
So come on tell me son what your one regret
Is it me loving you….are you angry yet
A am and let me tell you ..a aint mad yet
All those times you hurt me.what you think id forget
Bitch ave had brusies on ma face since the day we first met
And every night it et worse with hollow threats
The only reason you kept me was for the sex
But now am standing tal like a suffroget
Aint scared no more so are you ready yet
I realised.ave been playin Russian roulette
Every hits been getting harder..how harder will they get
Before I hit that ullet
Before you kill me dead
I aint taking the chance no more you’ve had it
Cause now am coming on strong..so are you ready yet

HOOK

You hurt me so much a cant explain
Sometimes I cry rivers of pain
The chains you’ve got me in drive me insane
And my energy is beginning to drain
From all those chains.im feelin restrained
Your wrath has left me powerless to your reign
But I wont let you do it ever again
The angers rushing thru ma viens
All the deamons you’ve injected have been slain
Ever since ave met you all you’ve done is complain
All the times I tried to reason wit you was in vien
Sometimes I pray that my life wasn’t so mundane
This relationships to fucked to maintain
Not a shread of love for you still remains
So here a go am shetering maself from the rain
And theres no goin back no more…this is the end

This is gonna b to audio if a can get it up and runnin….a found a really good bet fo it too
A need input cause i need this finished so a can get it goin....so defo give me some of your thoughts on it
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Old 07-26-03, 05:49 AM   #2
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ddamnnnn. i actually feel sorry for you after readin that, so i guess you did what you set out to do. 2nd verse was tight, liked it a lot. yeah ummm..stay safe. PEACE.
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Old 07-26-03, 09:26 AM   #3
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liked the second bit better
this is more of a poetical piece particularly the first verse
should be decxnt on audio
but i thnk the first part would be a bit too repetitive with the words u used...'yet' alot of times
felt the emotion in the first part though...needs tweaking for audio in my opinion
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Old 07-26-03, 10:13 AM   #4
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its supposed to be repetitive to piss the guy off..if you nko what a mean..am trying to get him angry lol a don kno though..soulds a bit to herby for ma likin actually..
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Old 07-26-03, 06:10 PM   #5
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^^^ I Wonder who is that....Motherfucker...!!!..lol


Nice Shit MA
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Old 07-26-03, 09:03 PM   #6
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marry me.......



this was tight the emotion effection your passion foir the subject must be real events the grasp is to tense
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Old 07-26-03, 09:16 PM   #7
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....word lol marry you? a dont kno well since ruths been CHEATIN i might take u up on that offer lol thats for th feed back yall
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Old 07-26-03, 09:22 PM   #8
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works for me mi amor i ptromice 4 yrs of loyalty a life of affairs but atleast i wil remember your name
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Old 07-26-03, 09:29 PM   #9
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lol that was your 11111 post...cooolll lol all the ones and you used it on ma awee.....i bet you donteven kno ma first name n e wyas
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Old 07-26-03, 09:58 PM   #10
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OUCh!!!!...lol
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