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What you gonna do....unfinished
IP: 5503 87F8
HOOK
What are you gonna do The choice is up to you What are you gonna do Whats gonna be your new excuse Am a driving you crazy yet Are you gonna hit me yet Ama making you sweat Is the pressure to much yet You want me to start countin the times you’ve crept Is the anger risin yet Have a hit a nerve yet Is the fist clenchin yet Are you squarin up ma face yet Planning on how to hide the body yet Thought bout what your lies are yet Thought bout how your gonna cover it up yet So come on tell me son what your one regret Is it me loving you….are you angry yet A am and let me tell you ..a aint mad yet All those times you hurt me.what you think id forget Bitch ave had brusies on ma face since the day we first met And every night it et worse with hollow threats The only reason you kept me was for the sex But now am standing tal like a suffroget Aint scared no more so are you ready yet I realised.ave been playin Russian roulette Every hits been getting harder..how harder will they get Before I hit that ullet Before you kill me dead I aint taking the chance no more you’ve had it Cause now am coming on strong..so are you ready yet HOOK You hurt me so much a cant explain Sometimes I cry rivers of pain The chains you’ve got me in drive me insane And my energy is beginning to drain From all those chains.im feelin restrained Your wrath has left me powerless to your reign But I wont let you do it ever again The angers rushing thru ma viens All the deamons you’ve injected have been slain Ever since ave met you all you’ve done is complain All the times I tried to reason wit you was in vien Sometimes I pray that my life wasn’t so mundane This relationships to fucked to maintain Not a shread of love for you still remains So here a go am shetering maself from the rain And theres no goin back no more…this is the end This is gonna b to audio if a can get it up and runnin….a found a really good bet fo it too A need input cause i need this finished so a can get it goin....so defo give me some of your thoughts on it |
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ddamnnnn. i actually feel sorry for you after readin that, so i guess you did what you set out to do. 2nd verse was tight, liked it a lot. yeah ummm..stay safe. PEACE.
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IP: 24A3 0EF0
liked the second bit better
this is more of a poetical piece particularly the first verse should be decxnt on audio but i thnk the first part would be a bit too repetitive with the words u used...'yet' alot of times felt the emotion in the first part though...needs tweaking for audio in my opinion |
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IP: 5503 87F8
its supposed to be repetitive to piss the guy off..if you nko what a mean..am trying to get him angry lol a don kno though..soulds a bit to herby for ma likin actually..
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IP: CEF5 716F
^^^ I Wonder who is that....Motherfucker...!!!..lol
Nice Shit MA
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IP: 1769 3B0F
marry me.......
this was tight the emotion effection your passion foir the subject must be real events the grasp is to tense |
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IP: 5503 87F8
....word lol marry you? a dont kno well since ruths been CHEATIN i might take u up on that offer lol thats for th feed back yall
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IP: 1769 3B0F
works for me mi amor i ptromice 4 yrs of loyalty a life of affairs but atleast i wil remember your name
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IP: 5503 87F8
lol that was your 11111 post...cooolll lol all the ones and you used it on ma awee.....i bet you donteven kno ma first name n e wyas
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IP: CEF5 716F
OUCh!!!!...lol
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