havent dropped in'a while so try an help me out a lil...

ways of the world leaves me in confusion/
hate an death bein a simple conclusion/
girls pretty as be in the game of prostitution/
is this simply our worlds new years resalution/
populations increasing races an beliefs still original in this world/
unlike hitler we shud come together teach peace to our boys an girls/
as a destiny of lust, im'a release my thoughts as if it were a must/
ghetto guns bust, love turns to rust/
our lives are eaten then were thrown away an forgotten like crust/
turn your back once an you'll get eaten alive inside so who do you trust?/
lifes a storm you juz gotta pray you dont die in the struggle for survival/
if it wasnt for lyrics an beat who would create a young'ns provoked hustle/
the ways of life may create hate but whos to blame but yourself for your mistakes/
for fuk sakes../
wont you people learn you get what you deserve so eat up wuts on your plate/
people may run there mouths an deate that your fake/
its your life live it you determine your own fate/
we all simple trees lets make like everydays christmas an decorate/
i was a black rose wasnt loved complete i grew from concrete/
YOUNG'N at age 13 i started romen the street found some beef/
seen my future people wanted me 6 feet deep/
watch yah backs players an playets from these clowns wit heat/
the ways of the world you dont know whos out to put you in'a forever sleep.../

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

I liked this shit... it was reflective of life and it seemed to flow pretty well for the most part although I saw a coupla linez that I don't think really went well together...but altogether this was a nice drop...

ways of the world leaves me in confusion/
hate an death bein a simple conclusion/
girls pretty as be in the game of prostitution/
is this simply our worlds new years resalution/

Nice Opener. Multis And Shit. Vocab Was Pretty Good. This Peice Had A Lot Of Nice Shit In It. Some Places The Flow Fell Off, But Other Than That, Everything Else Seemed Fine. Nice Spit Dunny.
Overall- 8/10

thanks Prolifik Prophet an Slik, waiten for some more feed back..

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

I'm Not Goin' To Break This Down, Mainly Because I'm Sittin IN FRont Of My Screen, With My eyes Half Closed With Boredem, o.k:

You had Some Nice LInes Here, Good Use Of Multis, Especially here: "ways of the world leaves me in confusion/
hate an death bein a simple conclusion/", That Was A Great Opening.

However It fell Of FRom There, (Apart From The Next Bar).

Vocab Was Average, Could Expand It more Though, And Through IN Some Worpdlay To Keep Us Entertained! Was A Decent Topic, You Spread It OUt Well..Props.

7/10 - THought iT Was O.k, Try Top keep The Bars The Same length Though, Up Your Vocab As Well

thanks man...i'll try an do so...thanks for the feedback...peace

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

WE CAN ALWAYS ADVANCE EACH POST IS AN OPPURTUNITY IM A VERY HONEST PERSON AND IN THAT I THINK THIS WAS A GREAT READ ENJOYED IT FROM JUMP TO LANDING FELL OFF IN SOME SPOTS BUT YOU PICKED IT BACK YP PRETTY NICE STAY UP AND I'LL HIT YOU FOR THAT COLLAB SOON

c'mon uppen...somebody gimme some feed back im tryin ta elevate i need opinions so c'mon an help a youngster out

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461