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Old 08-18-03, 01:18 AM   #1
MiCsYcKlE
The sYcKlE Makes Me Do It
 
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Just what i was feelin when i did this

Cutting.//
Slicing.//
I take the blade and allow it to graze my skin lightly~I dare mylself to take the challenge
of pressing harder.//
Harder.//
Harder.//
Until I can feel nothing~but the sharpness piercing my nerves~making a pain like no other
shoot throughout my body.//
I torture myself on the outside in efforts of relieving the pain on the inside//
the deep pain within that consumes my mind.//
Each cut I make represents a piece of my soul being cut and analyzed by me//
Each cut that I make represents a reason for my self-loathe.//
I etch the racing thoughts of my mind, or sometimes I just cut.//
I etch sticks to remember the insults that were thrown my way, and which will soon
restrict me to being what I am expected.//
I stop cutting when I have nothing more//
Nothing more at all.//
My skin heals//
I pick at the scabs which serve as a temporary reminder of the previous actions.//
My skin is reddend, but clear nonetheleast.//
Clear of cuts and remnants of cuts.//
I have no signs of the afflictions of hurt and pain to stare at anymore.//
This is only a temporary fix, because at the end of the week, when all is said and done.//
I’ll retreat to my room again.//
And make my body the canvass, and my thoughts the paint.//
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Old 08-18-03, 01:26 AM   #2
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this peice was good, you explained the reasoning and what you do... This is something that's for the most part common, I've known a good bit of people who have this problem... But I liked the way that you portrayed your body as the canvas... now whether or not the pain or the blood contribute to your paint is something different. I liked the stopping you had in this, and how you enhanced it with your punctuation... this was a nice peiece, sorry to hear that you cut... if you ever wanna talk you can IM me or somethin some time. Look forward to readin more of ya stuff in the meantime keep ya head up, peace
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Old 08-18-03, 01:31 AM   #3
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Thanks There Hun

yeah life sucks sometimes and i guess you just have to learn from your mistakes

Grasp life by the balls and make Your own life for yourself instead of waiting for one

that was def. a rough time for me
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Old 08-18-03, 08:06 PM   #4
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A superbly raw, on the edge style. Bringing forth the imagery and feelings of pain and anguish. Of virtual surrealism (heh).

And also a certain amount of complexity of mind-set. Of psyche. Of thoughts. Putting them in a very poetic and profound manner.

...though it has it's flaws. For the way it was written, it was damn good. And with each piece you write like this, it'll get better and better. Oh, and the certain imperfections are what make's the piece what it is.

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