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IP: 8D3A FBB7
They called him crazy and maybe he was erratic at times
Mastered the tactics photogenic, solving galactic crimes. Used the mind to find his ways through substantial issues Tried to throw him off with quotes of "we won't miss you." He didn't care, knowing that his powers came with burden Cleverness was showing, he didn't know why he was hurting. Reminisce the early years he went insane were beneficial Looked upon as free...being essential not superficial. Had a heart of gold with advice for every person; pure The lure had hooked millions, situation worsened; cured. When darkness falls they can stare into complete vividness Sending requests for better living...obsoletes the sickness. With no witness to explain the fault of the human race He would covertly examine with satan face to face.. By placing him lower than the ground beneath his soles He could easily beckon with the man he is of mold.. Following in the footsteps of a man so hailed greatness The last mile of the journey is closing derailed maintenance. Finally giving his life because that would plant his seeds.. As a follower of Jesus....He was supernatural indeed.
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IP: C1DA C961
this was pretty good..flow was nice..multis were good..content was ight..topic was kinda different..need to work on ya grammar tho..a few lines were.......and dnt put words just for flows sake..
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like that..pure..cured..seemed like u did it for flows sake..or ur supposed to pause before u say it..which slows the flow down..make n it irrelevant.. other than that..not bad..worth the read.. |
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IP: 4577 CD9A
^^stfu...
this was sick bud, flow was impeccable, and your grammar was fine, i dunno what "mr. english teacher" saw wrong with it, but i thought it was awesome, keep droppin... i look forward to reading more of your work... |
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IP: 9B91 D0C6
yeah i thot it was pretty dope too man, keep up the effort
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