Im a newb, but here goes

Spittin:
Everytime i wake up, find my girl wanting too break up\
Life aint easy at an early age\
Getting qweezy while getting boo'd off the stage\
So while i be spitten this onto the page\
It'l be written and locked in a cage\
Cant find a job, getting attacked by the mob\
Mc donalds put me down\
Saying i was a clown\
I wasnt ill, feeling so hurt inside\
About too kill, in a car collide\

As i said im a newbie