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Verses: Thursday.

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16-48 Line Limit...

No Bullshit...

Topic: Self-Help

Interesting topic here. Productions is about to take over SS. I'm just saying that cause I need 100 Characters, but it's true.

Sureal Adds: Not If Me And 13th Come Back

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Check In, check mate, check bounce, check getter ,check out...
Mad Man your already counting your win. cool lets make this one good.............................................. ..............................................

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Dear whoever cares.....

Last time I checked I was on top of the world-
But knew if I stood at the end of the funnel, I would B down for the swirl-
Thrown and got Hurled a million feet from where I started-
But I have to take it back, 2 where me and my life dearly departed-
Like the winning ticket, I got the chance of a lifetime-
A corporation going under, now stands with no lifeline-
It was my time, Like a sun-rise, for me to stand & shine-
Get things fine *fuck* why cant I press stop and rewind-
Sorry back to my story, yeah I was young and determined-
But money,sex and greed could make or deter-men-
Fortunes top ten after a few years w/ me behing the wheel-
Driving was easy but handling the books was where ride got me killed-
Like pool, We bank-ed millions, but off the side..some landed in pocket-
Charged up cards to the max, Like if I carried the socket-
Bout a year passed and many things went unnoticed-
Till Auditors came in and sung the right chorus-
*moneys missing-checks lost* but pointing fingers.... at the boss-
Yes I was caught and had to pay w/ jail as my cost-
goes to show ya how good a deck I was dealt-
but I fucked it up for just a taste of Self-Help-


Signed...................Anynomous'

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Interesting topical Bribeone, Blah, this is a key, so don't hate da playa, hate da game.

...::Prelude::...
Justin was a good guy, 27, with a loving wife
Had a great job, for a good company, and leading a good life
A junior executive making 6 digits, and sometimes even more
But his life turned around 180º when she walked in through the door

...::The Angel::...
A young girl only 21 who was in for an internship
Didn't know a thing at all, only how to work those hips
Scantily clad, with a super tight shirt, and a skirt up past her thighs
And Justin grew an extra bone, right in front of everyones eyes
He took his ring right of his hand, and went up to the new intern
And said "I can get us a room tonight, if that is what you yearn"
Expecting nothing, just gave it a shot, he expected a laugh for a reply
She said "Give me the hotel, and the number, I'll be there right at nine"

...::A Turn For The Worse::...
Most people thought that Justin would be smart and not try and press his luck
Thought it would be a one night stand, But that bitch he continued to fuck
He went in early, got home late, and didn't care if his wife was in the mood
But his wife was a PhD, she knew what she'd have to do.
She got the receipt for the hotel, and called to know of the next reservation
Slow and methodical was her plan, she had all the time and patience

...::In The Hotel::...
So another night, another date, another hotel room
Thought that he would find his bitch, but his wife spelled out his doom
The intern lie on the floor, two bullets through her head
She looked straight at her husband, and he knew that he was dead
When she was interrogated by the police for the murder that she had dealt
When asked why she had done it, she said, "Because he couldn't get himSELF HELP






Their is no fury like a womens scorn

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Voting For Mad Man Here...

I Think You Both Conveyed The Subject Well, Mad: You Went More For The "sTory-Telling" Apporach, As Brib: Went More For The "Personnal" Story.

You Both Done It Well, But I Think Mad Had The Edge In terms Of Originality n' Overall Concept.

Vote: Mad Man

i LOVED the last line mad man put in there..because in the end its so true

Bribes was also really good although it lacked that special thing that mad man did

mad man made the topic work for him rather than bribes whoworked on the topic...which i do so im not degrading it

but all in all it was down to a few lines mad man put in

And Justin grew an extra bone, right in front of everyones eyes

She got the receipt for the hotel, and called to know of the next reservation
Slow and methodical was her plan, she had all the time and patience

When asked why she had done it, she said, "Because he couldn't get himSELF HELP <<< that bit was smoothly added in i liked it



Their is no fury like a womens scorn < too true

the other thing that went for mad man was that he said it was a keystyle.sersiouly man if this is what your keystyle are like a wouldnt mind seeing a polished version

Vote= MM

This Was Straight, Both Of Yall Kilt The Subject. Nice Storys With Some Descent Bars. But Mad Man Look Like He Put More Effort And It Shows. Props To Both But My Votes Mad Man...

at first i was gonna give this one to bribe, but afta readin it a second time, mad man edged it out with spefication, this was an aight battle, expected ta see betta

bribe- rhyme scheme: 6, flow: 6, story: 7, total: 19

mad man- rhyme scheme: 6, flow: 5, story: 9, total: 20

bribe generalized more, mad was more specific actually gettin you hooked to his verse/ story, vote- mad man by a slim margin, peace, 1

peep my ish

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