noticed walls let people do horrify'n things...
wen people aint around u shud c wut tha devil brings...
goin to the docters cuz i seen blood spill galore...
all because of a crack in'a bedroom floor....


{verse 1}

so suspicious to why people change when around a certin someone/
one minute you laughin it up the next you pickin up the gun lord here i come/
who wud'a noticed the vialance an behavier of certine humans in this life/
brothers rappen girls dad pickin up the crow bar beaten on his first wife/
hidin from woons people never reveal bruises an scars apon ya arms/
deny'n the fact your liven crude an the streets are no longer playen safe/
met wut you thought was a typical someone but then he beats you for yo mistakes/
at this rate you have no energy to stand up ta get a glass of water so you dehydrate/
provided wit stress questioning death who wud'a realized the harm people cud create/
all cuz'a crack in tha floor an wut i seen i cant be left alone cuz i might helusinate/
ashamed for not seperatin the abuse wen i cud'a now im at the docters tryn'a fix my fate/
all cuz'a hate i let live in a home wit'a crack in the floor...
seen things i won'a stop dont gotta happen no more...

a crack in the floor...showed me blood galore...
a crack in the floor...you dont know whats in store...
a crack in the floor...men callen wifes dirty whores...
a crack in the floor...is that wat god intended privacy for...

{verse 2}

Late at night waiting for the screams why is it mom meets men but they turn out to be demons/
the devils been in my eyes lately taken me down a path i have never believed in got me screamin/
mom sits in her chair hypmotized so scared she cant leave the tragigic strife/
i looked through the crack one night seen my dad quickly pick up a knife/
never did i justify my own blood to cause such harm seen him smile while he cut her arm/
A home wrecker but i always thought he was the perfect dad wit special charms/
my judges were clearly wrong now that im older im going crazy watching whats goin on/
mom comes in the room every morning telling my to stay strong tells me my eyes are all wrong/
fear in my mothers eyes like you wudnt believe shes lost her pride i dont no how she breaths/
she's hiding this demon the devils child away in her home actin like she wont be conceaved/
i've seen it all the name calling the abuse its killing me 2 yet she claims im dreaming/
theres no way my brains playen tricks on me though i always wake up to her screaming/
a rath of critisizm in my every night delima a consant vibe that needs to demies/
worked up the courage to set a tone wit my ma'a tell i no hats goin on i seen it wit my eye/
told her straight up ive had enough im callen the police she quivered an cryed on my shoulder/
i told her she no longer needs to be in boundries a house is for love take it from your young soldjur/
smiled at me happily i seen her mind grow unrestricted told her once more shes a mother whos gifted/
her spirite uplifted she stood kinda shaly but she horrow was soon to settle/
finally that night came an he went to beat her up in'a flash she pulled a metal/
seen it wit my own eye she had em scarder then a bunny bein chased by bear/
she said she was no longer scared she didnt need em here she needed some air/
fianlly mom felt good no longer worried bout privacy horrow she could roll anywhere/



a crack in the floor...showed me blood galore...
a crack in the floor...you dont know whats in store...
a crack in the floor...men callen wifes dirty whores...
a crack in the floor...is that wat god intended privacy for...

Fianlly stood up for wht was right...
scared as shit but helped my life...
no longer caged relaxed at night...
no longer scared to use my eye sight...

{verse 3}

nights pass god is finally wit me, help me work up the courage to keep my family happy/
stars over me now, showen life is what you make dont keep secrets they juz stay crappy/
no more hidin from friends no more suspence feelin great no longer tence/
if i didnt see through that crack in the floor who knoes my life cud'a been up side down/
mom'a cud'a been stabbed by my father class "a" hipicrite a dumb ass clown now in jail town/
kids hide from torture as if it never happend sometimes its fine to run but you never know/
if i didnt stand up an help theres no teling how for the violance could go/
so now i sit back look through my crack in the floor an juz watch my life flow/


---tryn'a get a story line here...if any1 can help me out on some creativity to this story it'd be apreciated thanks peace---

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The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

ayo thun i'm really feelin dat da hook was aight but da verses is what got da track thun hope to hear it on audio aight one

the first 2 lines on the hook i didnt like much the last 2 were real mental,,,this seams rushed you had a good concept just didnt work it as good as you could.
the second verse stood out more seamed more genuine to you.
third verse a lil short but a great way to end.

over all a 7 out of ten

thanks ye all i'll do a remix an c wut i can over come of it...peace

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The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

Uppen...i need some feed back drop summin 1

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The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461