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"This is to you" please rate it
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This is to You
its like all of my life, i've been hiding the stress I've grown cold hearted, bearly a beat inside of my chest Emotional, my life is in doubt Instead of acting out the pain, im writing it out Most people say im outgoing and fun Picture this, my lips on the barrel, me holding the gun I say im fine, i've been lying for years Until it rains i have no choice but to hide in the tears Every friends been a bruise on the heart Im loosing my spark, like a short fuse in the dark Big stars got fortunes for forfiet and roast All i have is my moms, who supported me most Yea i'll amdit it, i actually cry And i'll gladdly leave for you if you'd ask me to die THis is to you, i made it my plans to pass Away just so you kno your the only chance i have Before i loose it, my life down the drain A lost soul, before he got crowned the fame Its 3rd and long, i need a first down to gain IF you know the real me , would u give pounds the same? Or would you look away and let me drown in pain? |
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Yea i'll amdit it, i actually cry
And i'll gladdly leave for you if you'd ask me to die ^that is love. Your flow is on point decent vocab and wordplay and imagery was good as well. To be frank this is.........GOOD SHIT!!! Not often do I see open mics that read like poetry. The emotion in this is felt and I've been where you are in this piece, it's not fun I know. I hope you enjoyed writing this because I enjoyed reading it. 8/10 |
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