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Old 08-21-03, 11:38 PM   #1
DaviD WoRdplay
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.Revenge is Sweet.

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If you wrote a story on you life, would anybody read it?
Or would it be full of bullshit, half the content unneeded
It's credibility depleted by the lies you told your peers
Over the years you feared being the cause of all the tears
Your own death, would you be mourned or just forgotten
With torn chests, lost your heart long ago, it turned rotten
Plottin' the crimes that you never seemed to commit yourself
Hiding the grim from your family afraid to admit your wealth
Would they approve of evil things done just to make money
If you knew your kid was buying crack, would it be as funny
Com'on Dummy, you think you’re a thug by taking a life
What if that life taken was the brother of your loving wife
You never knew it but when it came down to it, you were next
In an hour, you'll have two holes in your chest over some sex
Yeah you got some pussy but didn't know who her man was
A rookie thinkin' big time, she was fine but kid, She's was mine
Now we sit here, you tied up and me contemplating your demise
Don't be surprise if I leave you here to rot, body swarmed by flies
Fucked with the wrong guys wife now it's time to lose your life
You pick, either I finish off my clip or have fun with the knife
Either way your fucked, so there's no reason to pray anymore
Before you die, you'll know how it is to be fucked like a whore
Turn you in to be sent to jail, in a year I'll get you out on bail
Know it's your time when your sons finger arrives in the mail
Plan's too perfect to fail, don’t think of running, I'll only catch you
And if I have to, I'll just go holla at your little cousin Matthew
Slice him in the bathroom, only after he tells me where you are
I WILL kill everything that’s close to you, so don't stray too far
This is the path you chose to take, don't think I'm that type of guy
Don't boast about the lives & wives taken, time to die, so say goodbye
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Old 08-21-03, 11:43 PM   #2
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ALOT TO PONDER IF MY STORY WAS TOLD NO ONE WOULD CARE CAUSE IT AINT NOTHING WE DONT SEE EACH DAY IN REPETITION.

THIS WAS WELL COMPOSE I LIKED THE MULTI'S(I JUST LEARNED WHAT THEY ARE LOL) AND THE WORD CONTEXT THE SUBJECT EXPLOITATION AND GRAPHICNESS.

THE ENDING STILL LEFT ME IN SUSPENCE YOU SEAMED TO KILL THE CHARATCER CAUSE YOU NKNEW THE SET UP WOULD BE FOR A FULL LENGTH SONG.TIGHT IDEA HOT DROP STAY UP.
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Old 08-22-03, 03:39 PM   #3
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uppin for meta 5 damn dont sleep
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Old 08-22-03, 03:43 PM   #4
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yo that was some hot shit thun had me thinkin on da real i see y you named yaself meta5 can't wait to hear more shit from u thun kna mean one
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Old 08-23-03, 02:05 AM   #5
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Sick Piece , I liked the concept too it , ur Multies were Great , But you didnt have much Vocab in this piece , Wordplay was two thumbs Up......And you stayed on Topic , Overall Sick Piece man...........................8/10
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Old 08-23-03, 02:09 AM   #6
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Nice piece kept me interested the whole time. This shit was deep and mean as shit nice work man.
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Old 08-23-03, 03:43 AM   #7
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This gave me that "kim" feeling real dark and dangerous. The flow was on point the vocab wasn't real in depth but it didn't have to be. The imagery was the shining point of the song. The topic is a little uh...............graphic and somewhere in the middle you switched the setting and i got a little confused but found my way back quickly so good piece man. 8.4/10
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Old 08-23-03, 06:25 PM   #8
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Quote:
Originally posted by Bash
But you didnt have much Vocab in this piece

Vocab isn't nesscessary but thanks for the replies...
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