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08-24-03, 11:29 PM | #1 | ||
The sYcKlE Makes Me Do It
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The Catch Peep and Critique
IP:
MiC SyCkLe: The Quarterback
A yo..... Laying flat on my back with WoRdZ screaming in my ear hole primary receiver covered but the ball should've been thrown (SACK) Now facing 4th and 8 if we PLAY OFF we go home 27 seconds left set just inside the red zone This team's home with us down by 5 tells the story (14-9) 60,000 plus hating me in this hostile territory I'm having a bad game and I'll never point the finger perrineal pro bowler playing like a 4th stringer This jersey number 13 was like Kal 'El's might MAN, on most days I'm SUPER today I fight kryptonite Maybe our last huddle and needing a steller play selection I get down on one knee "GUYS I NEED SOME DAMN PROTECTION" Star receiver no connection tried to hit him but interception White that corner shuting you down like crack houses around election Man tell me you can beat him now's the time you needed most I just got the play selection red right 80, Z post....... Words White : The Receiver aight aight ten flat, ima hit it stat ten paces forward, cut and slash like that "MiC, how you gonna ask me a question like that!!"/ "look at the number on my back, 21, im gifted human highlight film, Dominique, call the shift kid"/ hike the ball, its lifted,Quarterback drops back the runningback points the finger at the linebacker comin for the sack/ side step attack, attack, i react, instincts cant blink split second time to think/ im covered like a blanket, i streak at its highest peak fake left, feet hits the dirt like a fist connects to ya chest/ mental stress, cut hard, disregard the guard all i see is endzone, dont hear the moan and groan of the crowds horomones in tone/ defenders feets like stones, im wide open hit the pocket like a rocket "MiC lets see you cock it" im at the 2 yard line, now who can stop it yo wheres the Quarterback usin that mental diagnostic/ tick tick tick tick tick!!!!!!!!/ MiC SyCKLe: The Quarterback I'm elluding any and everybody defending trying not to be a quarterback jacked and upended Wordz, I see you streaking but these backers trying to serve me with a fist full of jersey trying to send us home early But I fluster hard looking a nose guard in the stomach initially thinking run it but I juked him and left him flummoxed WerdZ nearing the goal line in full stride top receiver is wide open and we still 5 behind Left hand waving aimless almost hear him call my name big time QB even bigger in big games Here's the exchange: I toss a frozen rope just like practice release the ball and blinded by multiple camera flashes I can't see anything and I'm wondering what happened I get drilled from the blindside say a prayer and hope he catch it.................owwww my back!!! WerdZ WhiTE: The Receiver yo yo enter WHite, im a front page reciever football fever, the defender slipped and ima leave ya/ i see the release, "damn, MiC Jus took one" hit the crease, the sound of the crowd is peace/ i concentrate on the pigskin, yo fuck that, i wanna win but it seems like forever waitin for the ball to reach the end......zone, number 21 stands alone but the safety is still free to roam strong side, yo i dont condone/ quick reaction, yo this is traction against traction theres the lights, the camera, its action MiC is still on his back son/ yo i got this kid!!!, i can already see the agony of defeat in the faces of these squids/ perspiration sensation, looks of devastation across the crowds fascination, theres no elation just elevation, gravitation is not in consideration/ its like i pause for meditation.......streak, discrete i leap, all the sudden its like a triple team brings heat, damn i thought i had these cats beat/ gonna have to make one of those rare type grabs like a black man catchin a cab yo MiC you can put this on my tab/ caught a defenders quick jab, i dont see the flag so i continue the play, im still in the air son its like "May Day May Day!!!!!"/ one handed relay, im goin down, defender tuggin like a blood hound, underground sound hit the ground, eyes is scoreboard bound/ 15-14, the strain and pain is lifted the crowd has called there own shift kid just anotha Illcat Lefrak collab thats gifted thats "The Catch" you shouldnt of miss kid/ |
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08-25-03, 01:33 AM | #2 | |
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IP:
long winded and unimaginative
you gotta actually write to make to read interested from the first line. i really had to push myself to get thru it. you are struggling w/ metas, but you nearly have the grasp. i think it would have been more interesting if you'd used more descriptive words. dont give up! |
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08-25-03, 11:43 AM | #3 | ||
The sYcKlE Makes Me Do It
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IP:
DO YOU EVEN GET THE POST
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08-25-03, 11:59 AM | #4 | |
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IP:
i have to say the concept was imaginative, but it wasnt executed very well, overall it was just about average, for vocab, metas multis..6/10....
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08-25-03, 12:31 PM | #5 | ||
The sYcKlE Makes Me Do It
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IP:
Yeah itr was done on aim this morning so i agree could have been better
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