Never will i let people opinions deteriate my confidence,
Attack my pronciples and i'll eleborate on wots prominent/
My dominance!! captivate thoughts to sought all hate,
Lifes a test whether i fall short or always look for an escape/
Traped in shit by what people try to use and distort,
My thoughts and make me look feeble even tho i fought/
All sorts but thats maybe why i'm too sweet for rap,
Fuck them cats!! eventually tricks will shut they traps/
Look back on what i spat...answer to evolve as an mc,
My student is my mind to have a masterful degree/
Climb the unclimable vert thro the hurt and triumph,
Did i need this for hyped or cuz i needed to be pumped/

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NAH...just bored

Damn.. good wordplay 4 a 14 year old ... biggest word i knew was biaaatch @ that age

anyway~

good shit felt what u was sayin fo realllllll. im say it could have done with more meta's.. not punches or multis.. it wasnt the type of flow that needed them.. but meta4s wudda made it even hotter. i liked this meta line
My student is my mind to have a masterful degree
^that was hot i give it 8.5/10,... nice shit

could you give feedbqack on the plz
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=77153

lol@Richo

Potent Dawg some nice shit man, ...fo real ...nice vocab....nice flow....very nice peace, luved to read it..Respect to u dawg....peace...TwO

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Yeah, this was pretty good my man, definatly an improvement from the last piece of yours i read, flow is a lot stronger now, the internal rhyming helps a lot with that, you maintained it nicely, vocabulary worked well with this piece, infact - my only real flaw was its length, try to make an open mic piece at least 20 lines in length cause as a rough guideline, anything under 16 lines isnt enough to tell a good story / display a topic nicely.

Anyways, not a bad read my man, rounded it off nicely at the end, flows a lot better, maybe could add more multi's here and there where you've started placing internals, then you'll improve.

Props.

Reply To Mine: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...8232#post748232

HOT PEACE NEEDS A LIL TUNING BUT PERSONALY IT CAME STRAIGHT ILL JUST LENGTHEN A LIL OTHER THEN THAT YOU GOT IT I GIVE THIS THE SCARED 10/10