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Old 09-05-03, 07:58 AM   #1
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Rebirth: a new life

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the crash of the tidal wave rages and sounds madly
i surface in the resurgance and take breath gladly
sadly the time is over and death is near
i pause for insight and to wipe a tear
bloodshed and racism race away from my mental
hard to believe near the end life is so simple
opressive thoughts of deppression press against my temple
leaving my brain puckered numb skull fractured and dimpled
and so i await my fate silently dying quietly
as the cold hand touches my soul i surrender finally
and with a sigh i breathe new life into the soul of another
even in death i remain truly your brother

deranged i slay and spray vile venomous bile
the knots of deciet defeat my most sadistic wiles
i supress the weight pressed upon my chest
and concede defeat only when no life is left
i spin in circles slowly sinning certain symphonies
await my executioner who was sent to me at sentencing
a lost prophet who profits from filled coffins
is my life really worth a handful of silly coppers?
black trapped and taxed for taxations sake
i surface and spread hate only to be burned at the stake
and with a sigh i breathe new life into the soul of another
even in death i remain truly your brother

fictional irony silencing violence with precocious piety
fianlly life is extended to blacks in society
dying in record numbers victims of a new worlds propreity
new age slaves forbade to eat bathe or shave
over reaction to antics on stage upstage the battles between each race
face to face with faceless races pacing to rape the rapist
fact is my people are barely alive fuck the imaginary makeshift....
and with a sigh i breathe new life into the soul of another
even in death i remain truly your brother
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Old 09-05-03, 04:38 PM   #2
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wow nice piece
definitely was feeling it... it just had it all, great flow, imagery, vocab... just great.
Nothing really bad to say bout it... in the way I saw it, it's like there's no individuality... we all beat as one. We are one! And that's a great message you're sending out there.
Keep droppin, much respected

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Old 09-05-03, 08:53 PM   #3
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vocab was tight,wordplay,structuring,all that was clean,keep spittin.peace.~1~
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Old 09-06-03, 03:12 AM   #4
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thank you Diverse and Split-eyes uppin for more feedback
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Old 09-08-03, 10:21 PM   #5
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upping
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Old 09-09-03, 12:28 AM   #6
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This was incredible.
Very original and captivating.
I've grown rather fond of you and your work Prophiit, Keep blessin us.
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Old 09-09-03, 09:53 AM   #7
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Yet another nice peice from my buddy! I liked this a lot, seemed like there was a lot of emotion in this, and I may be wrong but I sensed some kind of anger or hurt through out this (Like I said, may have been a misconception) You definatly displayed your skill throughout this by the internal rhyming mixed with your use of vocab. I'm impressed by this peice, and the thought that went into and depth of it. What else can I say man? Nice drop, peace
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Old 09-11-03, 07:54 PM   #8
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Nice drop profit, simple yet coplex, vocab was on point, nice imagery and the flow was all there. Very good work, please keep them comming, you have much talent.

my favorite line:

and with a sigh i breathe new life into the soul of another
even in death i remain truly your brother

I can realy relate to your message...Just like calisto I too can see some frustration and or angery put into this piece, making it a personel one...

Much respect
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Old 09-11-03, 09:22 PM   #9
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main man holding it down here..we have
one of the best assembeled crews ever...
the poets alone..mad props..way to rep...

even while dilluting your vocab on this you
still get your point across in a manner that
would be great to hear...*hint hint*
I wont be around as much but keep doing
your thing and put out a cd mi hombre...

start reserving*

la paz

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Old 09-11-03, 10:48 PM   #10
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This was awesome. The wordplay was great, the message, execution, flow was all perfect. The opening really set the stage, I loved it..

the crash of the tidal wave rages and sounds madly
i surface in the resurgance and take breath gladly
sadly the time is over and death is near
i pause for insight and to wipe a tear
bloodshed and racism race away from my mental
hard to believe near the end life is so simple

I like the life is so simple line here especially, because it is. People make it complicated, but when near death, when all that matters is life or the soon to be absence of it, it becomes simple again.
And I wonder if we really are granted all the cosmical answers in that moment before death? I truly hope so lol Without that insight Ill be sitting in the afterworld still driven crazy by questions.

and with a sigh i breathe new life into the soul of another
even in death i remain truly your brother

This is beautifully written.
Really nice piece profiit. Kudos~
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