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Old 09-11-03, 11:46 PM   #1
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Terror..

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Is Terror Just Another Word, Found In A Book..
Leaving Shook, A Thought Or Maybe a Look?..
When The Two Towers Fell So Did My Heart..
Undying Starts, All From Families Ripped Apart..
Husbands and Wives Lost, Children Left Chained..
Nothing Gained, Insecure Instances Bring On Pain..
No Reasoning Behind Them, Never Turn Your Back..
Leaving Minds Packed, All From Emotions Lacked..
Children Left Weary, Families Torn And Dreary..
Leaving Friends Varied, Fear The, Or Queried..
To All Of The Victims And Families, Draw Near..
Look Into The Mirror, In The Past, In My Prayers..
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Old 09-12-03, 12:11 AM   #2
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^This was a short and simple piece composed really well with lots of mixed emotions with it.

..In commemorating the people who died and the ones who lost their love ones this anniversary of 9/11. Including those who seen that massive historical event on the soil of their own homeland.

..Its been 2 years man...and still it is a HUGE conspiracy. What happened? Whats Next? Whats the Government doing? Personally, i think they used 9/11 to get to the people so we can start the whole thing with Afghanistan and Iraq. After the whole conpiracy going on in Afghanistan...then there goes Iraq. Its like the whole Osama Bin Laden thing was all left out and the focus right now is in Iraq and still with those massive destruction weapon things again that they havent find yet.

To me...Its a whole BIG conundrum.

...Your emotions in ur piece reflected upon the reality today. The whole idea was pretty good. I liked the ending.
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Old 09-13-03, 01:26 AM   #3
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Beautiful bit of poetry. No wonder you're 22-2 you pulled some badass rhymes in this drop. I am impressed.

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Old 09-13-03, 09:46 PM   #4
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^^ .. He Is Dope Num Nutz.. ^^

Fuck The Record, I Think This Peice Is Dope
Like Sureals Blow Job Skills.. Right Sureal? =)
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Old 09-14-03, 01:22 AM   #5
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Old 09-14-03, 02:21 AM   #6
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this was well done...an overdone topic but this can
never get enough words to really mend everyone
hearts...with those tapes out and all now...
after work there was the moment of silence and
someone sang for a minute and I almost cried seriously..
a girl in one of my friends class didnt know what day
it was and was asked to leave by everyone in the class..

how could someone not know this date?
did you lose any family members man?

sorry for gettin semi mushy sureal but this was good....
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Old 09-15-03, 11:48 PM   #7
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agreed it was good.........i hate repeating what was already said....i also i agree with shiznit........politically it feels like we relive 9-11 every time bush opens his mouth......he's milking it i think.....back to the poem i think there was a lotta emotion packed into a short piece it would be nice to hear in audio if you expanded it.....poetically it was off the hook perfect the way it was birthed.........keep ya head up........one
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Old 09-16-03, 09:49 PM   #8
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that was a nice drop i felt it, the flow was cool, and the emotion, i'd give it 9/10...it was short but got to the point an had a good structure peace
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Old 09-17-03, 07:44 AM   #9
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Usually i dont like hearing more about 9/11 but i thought this was really good, you didnt use all the old cliche's about it. i thought it was great.keep droppin
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Old 09-18-03, 08:16 PM   #10
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It's the more straight forward look on it. But with a slight edge here and there.

I felt once or twice the use of some words to fit in with the flow was a bit rigid. But that didn't really matter much. As it was short, emotionally mellow piece (the emotion part i got from how i read it)...

Shiznit - You love your conspiracies, don't ya? Watch 24 by any chance?...Shame X-Files has been watered down now, but loads of past episodes to enjoy i guess...(!)...

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Old 09-19-03, 12:55 AM   #11
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X-files was good...too bad they got off...Of course conspiracies in this world made our lives more interesting...its like there's a lot to learn still and all that we have right now is not enough and we still wanna know stuff after stuff after stuff and stuff after that. 24 on the other hand is prettty interesting...gotta love those shows.

But mostly Sureal's piece was incredible . Deep meanind under simple contructed words.
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