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wtf...............you thik motherfuker tell me if ya gonna set up a battle chump...................anyways chekin tha fuk in............

Aight listen….this bitch be setting up battles b4 tellin
Peeps we be battlin……oh well if it’s a battle ya want.
Then ya not gonna get it….this’ll be a murder!!!!!!

First of Renegade, no doubt this biter is gonna be caught runnin, (wot renegades do)
Inject this act with Aids, jus to punish more I’ll throw Big Pun In.
I’m Comin’, with a system that’ll encrypt this bitch like tha Matrix,
So I’m Browsin, to delete this site of all Renegades tasteless Fake Shit.
But in the firing line, I’ll be teaching a lesson to this gullible Student, (check pro)
Coz wot I read from his texts, are jus fucked up inaudible Illusions.
Their clears to show those Renegades Burnin, like a fire on bonfire Night, (English tradition)
And a decomposed fag that I see Gurnin, left for dead in this present Fight.
“Plz sir can I have some more…”, now this orphan is askin to be Feeding,
But jus like the Artful Dodger, to win this battle ya ned to cheat wid Steeling.(Oliver Twist)
So in the end, you’ve been Evaluated, Encrypted and dam right Ejaculated,
But I guess that’s wot ya get, for being tha most detested and sincerely Hated.

Aight done…..lets get some votes

I rip your chest your apart to show who's da realest|
and 'have you holding your heart' so you can 'play wit ur emotions' while you 'pledging allegiance'|
I'm like nasty weathers, catch you by surprise and attack you fellas|
Drastik Measurez get off by anal 'elastic pleasures'|
That's how Cyanide keeps a smile on his face| (Check his profile)
Tongue showin like he ready to take in some 'protein shake'|
14 snake venom can't reckon with da damage I've done|
Shatter your gum, wanna 'catch ya breath' then why not 'bandage ya lung'?|
Ravaged ya mom, even da 'camera crew' took 'cum shots' on ya mom|
Not the type to fist it out I'd rather just shot you and run|
More 'dots' on this bum than 'targets of hitmen' or kids wit da 'pox'|
Infinite shots have your soul 'leap' outta you like 'jack in da box'|
You're life's 'running short' bitch like a 'race of midgets'|
The case is finished, show 'dead lions' where their 'den~is' like their name's Menace|

i know it looks like da bars real long, but it aint, I wrote this shit in umm that text document, and each shit hold in one line, so wuteva

btw, good verse playa

let's have some votes on this

opener:Tie
closer:Tie
flow:LC
structure:renegade
punches:Tie
personals:LC
wordplay:LC
Fave Lines:
LC:I’m Comin’, with a system that’ll encrypt this bitch like tha Matrix,
So I’m Browsin, to delete this site of all Renegades tasteless Fake Shit
~tight~

Renegade:
I rip your chest your apart to show who's da realest|
and 'have you holding your heart' so you can 'play wit ur emotions' while you 'pledging allegiance'
~ur best line~


my vote:LC

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Punches: L
Metas: Deff L
Vocab: Deff L
Personals: Other dude
Creativity: L
Originality: Other dude


K L tood this, he seemed way more experiecned, nice verse i thought good similes and wordplay, sick shit

Yo L, can u please hit this up ide really appreciate it

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=83338

appreciate not sleepin on dis, but sometimes i wonder if anyof u got da lines I wrote?

jes hope u guys really read both verses clearly, thats all im saying


anyways, upping this for more voters

nah man ya did have a nice verse some of tha comparisons was ill.....and delvin into ma profile/features was ill.....tryout for my crew....Drastik Measurez....you'd be a good edition.....uppin uppin 111111111111111111111111ssssttttt

da renagade had a good flow that i liked , but the lyrical cyanide had better wordplay, and punches-----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

VOTE - LC

Had Tha Better Structured, Overall Verse . . .
Betta Punches / Werdplay...Won Most Of Tha Categories . . .
Renegade Had Flow But That's Not Enuff To Win It..
..He Fell Off In Alotta His Lines...

Damn Lyrical I Wuz Shocked By This Verse
...If U Can Spit Like That All Tha Time, Ur Elgible For Diamond Mindz . . .
U Certainly Should Consider It . . . Post A Tryout Verse . . .
U Deff Got More Talent Then Drastik Measures...
They're Wakk, But If U Wanna Stay Loyal, That's Coo
U Kno Where To Find Us

PEACE

flow fell off, funny u say it when I rapped dis shit out while writing it and it flowed well.........you cant look and text and tell the "exact flow" to it

cuz u cant tell how long i pause between lines and shit like that

if i said

I'ma kill you|
Cuz im better than you|

you cant really tell the pause between the first 'you' and 'cuz'
and u cant tell how fast i say it

but wuteva

uppin for votes
and its funny how i never get mention for havin wordplays/metas

u ppl need to read da shit and not browse da verse

I got to agree wit Artiqlit on this one, LC had the Better Punches and wordplay, Renegades flow fell off at some times, but overall this was a good battle well worth the read...

Vote = LC

Hey can U peep one of the battles in my sig?
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uppin for more votes


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