Verse #1: (written by Masta C)
When everything is seen clearly…your eyes become teary..cause you just know how/
It would feel do die now…and nothing can express how you feel…ya just shout/
And no matter what happens…theres just no actions…that can make you feel/
Like everyone is for real…time makes wounds heal?..i don’t think that’s the deal/
And nothing can hide…how I feel on the inside…all hurt and torn/
I could have sworn…that it was real…missing her touch that was warm/
I trust them…but in the end…all we were….was just friends/
And no one had a hand to lend…I guess that’s why things were meant to be pretend/
Now im left here…face full of tears…just feeling down/
I just drift away…eyes in a gaze..cause in my sorrow I drown/


Verse #2: (written by Gene Pool)
alright, it's time to speak my mind, on what it's like, for nice guys to be last in line/
so yo, check it, I lay here breathless, awaiting my death wish/
was this some kind of freak passive like a hidden passage?, like a missing one of the tenth commandments?/
I ban this shit, from happenin spillin spit, dis-colored red, watch it stream down into the drainage ditch/
a good pistol whip, and a fist into the side of the ribs, y does it gotta end like this?!/
face'in down the end of a barrel, waitin for the bullet to put an end, and make me become sterile/
right now I'm in denial, can't accept the fact, that I'm about to take a curb stomp and a cap in the back/
and for what? I never really gave it to much thought, maybe god just hates my guts, cuz I don't try to start shit up/
instead guys like us, just get shit on cuz were nice to everyone, but no we can't have that/
cuz only assholes are allowed to get past that, that's why this life is wack/


Chorus: (written by Gene Pool and Masta C)
Nice guys always finish last, Like your a peice of trash/
Your the guy that gets bashed, never the perfect match/
cuz nice guys finish last, always strapped for cash/
tryin to live, but life changes all to fast/
Always feeling down, speaking but with no sound/
Heart left unfound, Cause Nice Guys finish last now/


Verse #3: (written by Masta C)
Every minute of every day…you feel alone and afraid…cause your full of sorrow/
And with all that she said…it went to your head…its so hard to swallow/
Cause your heart is scarred…and ya know its gonna be hard…but no one knows how ya feel/
Making ya wanna go kill...cause you loved her for real…I guess some things weren’t meant to be revealed/
Everything hurts so much…missing her touch…and the feel of her lips/
Missing every kiss…but in the end you gave her your heart..and she gave it back ripped/
Wounds go so deep…that the pain just leaks…right out and you don’t care/
Two of a kind, once a pair…now just nothing, I guess life really isn’t…that fair/
Remembering all the times I spent with her…I just wish they would have went slower/
Cause its just hard to lift my head up off these shoulders….and I just wish me and her werent over/


Verse #4: (written by gene Pool)
when will this shit end, all the discrimination against u but they still call u a friend/
but it’s all pretend, and ppl always tell u to put it back into the past tense/
like that saying forgive and forget, it’s something I’ve lived my life by, but it always fails in the end/
so the question runs deep, inside my veins, like a secreted venom slowly poisoning me/
will things ever be the same as my younger days? But no, cuz this life shits lame, and I’m always takin the blame/
can’t cry cuz my tears are so dried from all the shame, and the pain, that rips me away/
trying to make me insane, but I can’t awake, cuz this dream has me enslaved/
doomed to run my course of life through, until my time is overdue/
and it’ll be a revelation, when I finally come to, so fuck u and all the rest of u/
cuz nice guys always come last in the race of life, never able to break through that thick sheet of ice/


Chorus: (written by Gene Pool and Masta C)
Nice guys always finish last, Like your a peice of trash/ - (Masta C)
Your the guy that gets bashed, never the perfect match/ - (Masta C)
cuz nice guys finish last, always strapped for cash/ - (Gene Pool)
tryin to live, but life changes all to fast/ - (Gene Pool)
Always feeling down, speaking but with no sound/ - (Masta C)
Heart left unfound, Cause Nice Guys finish last now/ - (Masta C)

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Hey leave us some feedback on this new peice, much appreciated, thanks.

Dat was goos nice vocab. and good rymes overall it was good.keep droppin hot shit.holla

Hey man thanks for the feedback, keep it coming, Much Appreciated, Thanks.

yo dat shit was hot. nice rhymes and use of vocab. altho it was longf i enjoyed reading it, keep it up
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Hey thanks man, yeah its long most of our peices are lol, but thanks for the feedback. Much Appreciated, Thanks.

u think that ones long u should check out our first open mic "life is what we hate (feat. Masta C) lol but thanx for the feedback man much appreciated so keep it comin.

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that shit was hella ill. the vocab and wordplay kicked fuckin ass, the content and wordplay were great. overall id rate that post a 9-9.5/10. good post, keep postin guys i really enjoyed readin that.

yo can u please reply to a song i wrote?
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=81167
thanx

peace.....

Hey man thanks for the feedback, and yeah ill leave you some feedback, Much Appreciated, Thanks.

yo uppin this for some more feedback so come on ppl keep it comin. thanx in advance and thanx for all the feedback so far

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Uppping this for some more feedback, Leave us somemore feedback, much appreciated, thanks.

this was a tight piece, a little too long, masta c repeated some lines but other than that this was tight.keep spittin.~1~

thanx for the feedback keep em comin peeps.

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Its definately well thought out and planned. I think that the chorus could use some tighter structure. There is no doubt that this rhyme had skills put into it. I like yo style.