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Old 09-12-03, 01:06 PM   #1
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Talking "Is It Me"

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Is it me with the lost mind, where I cant find how much time, Before my life goes on the line, A place where something evil is goin to happen, I never thought I'd be rappin instead my parents say im lazy, Im slackin, but I know Im good, but what is it I'm lackin

Is it me with the slang words, that I choose to say obsurd, or is my akward adjectives and adverbs, I'll smack you backwards, with less brains that you've got until you lack words

Is it me that alwayz have to go first, I think to much and my brains gonna burst, but first b4 I lay my verse, and startin castin spells like I was just cursed, to enemies that alwayz have to put there to pennies b4 I finish them off...literally

Is it me that alwayz have to be an outkast,that seems to last when it happened along time and now 5 years past, that makes me mad and I wanna woop someones @$$, and put them in coma so they cant get no health card pass

Is it me that alwayz judge dudes, they disrespect me and be rude, I dont do nothyn I just ignore them cuz they a fool, but that dont work cuz they end up droppin out of school just to get to me, so they can finish me...intentionally

Is it me that gets judge like im a retard, Im so stupid I got all F's on my report card, all I do is get drunk and go to gay bars, so I can turn into one and be someone...a Gay Superstar

Is it me that my life is a preview, I'll diss you and still wont get a source preview, Im crazy enough to kill you, but instead take legal action and sue you, I dont hear you, cuz all I hear is blah blah blah Im guilty as charge, see you

Is is me that thinks Im a bad sport, or is a judgemental issue that we have to take it to court to settle this once and for all b4 I have to export your escort, Your nothyn but an import tryin to come to the US to get your transported goods come to the hood

Is it me that alwayz gets the blame, Im not insane but if all you hear out someones mouth is your name, then you'll get crazy and now your ashamed, cuz u wanted to quit school b4 anything changed but instead just stayed the same, im invane

Is it me cuz all you do is make me sick, you prick, all you do is complain and talk shit, but I have something for you, if you dont quit by the count of two, ima make sure you mouth gets sewed and ur wig split, but i didnt do nothyn, im innocent

Is it me becuse Im me, or is you that want to be friends with me, Im lost as you can see, but I try and still dont succeed, and I look into the sky and this guy by name of God,..he believes in me
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Old 09-12-03, 04:03 PM   #2
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alright but could be improved aswell
nice but a bit repetative
and some times it seemed that your were so raped up in rhyming you forgot what you were spitin
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Old 09-12-03, 06:55 PM   #3
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^^^this guy.....makes me laugh..I know exactly what i was sayin
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Old 09-12-03, 07:38 PM   #4
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well,u got potential but a lil too much eminem in ya rhymes [my life is a preview, I'll diss you and still wont get a source preview]

just changed up a bit,your style needs to be improved,you skipped around on what you were sayin too much,and even though u know what you were talkin about,we dont,aiight vocab,a little repetitive but u can improve,keep elevatin.~1~
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Old 09-14-03, 02:54 AM   #5
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i thought it was pretty good, the vocab was ok, the wordplay was aight, and the concept was nice. i think u need to elevate some more so just keep postin, youll get better wit experience.
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