I let out a breath, and it forms a white cloud-
im standin all by myself, so i just think outloud\
I think of all the times that i've fucked up in my life-
how i let down my parent, kids, and mostly my wife\
Now theres nowhere to hide, because im running from my mind-
i try looking for sanctuary, but theres nothing to find\
I try digging deeper, within the depths of my soul-
instead of finding buried treasure, i dig myself a deeper hole\
Soon enough im so deep, that im trapped inside-
nobody can even save me, ive been swallowed by pride\
And now i've been denied death untill the day that i die in my mind-
doomed for eternity trapped inside my own head and confined\
The only person who can help, is nobody that is living-
and the only way to help my self it to see that its myself im forgiving\
But you cant forgive somethin, it you cant come to terms-
you only dig deeper in your mind like earth worms\
They slowly eat away, making a million different tunnels-
and they slowlty pour new thoughts in your head, like they were using funnels\
Then finally one day you realize that there is nothing that can be done-
so then you also realize that you have always been like this, even since day 1\

ill shit.. the flow was good i loved dat
ending.. kept me thinkin had alot of good
thoughts.. nice job here kid..

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dont sleep herbs, i know you see it reply!

YO THIS WAS EXQUISIT YOUR FORM OF COMPOSING TROJECT YOUR WORD CONTEXT ALOT BETTER THEN MOST TIGHT PEACE GOOD FLOW AND GREAT SKILL TWIN

It had a nice flow to it. Very poetic. *and now I've been denied death until the day that I die in my mind* That was deep.

^^^thx.. lookin for some constructive feedback still people

^^^thx.. lookin for some constructive feedback still people ^^^thx.. lookin for some constructive feedback still people

dont sleep herbs, i know you see it reply!

tight, cudda had more vocab but other then that, this is more poetry, defenatly feelin dis

nice