i didnt do any reasearch or anythin on this, i based it on my personal interpretation and my belief on how this may have happened. i had a dream about this, and i woke up and wrote this verse, im gonna make it into a full track to record, but this is jus the first verse. Peace

yo im the man of my family,
my daughters and sons
livin in peace underneath the african sun
got peace over generations
and united
we feeling ready for whatever may come
but then BANG people starting to run
look to my left side
flash of white skin is reflected of guns
none of the kids aint never seen one
move closer
chains round their arms end their lives of fun
one man got shot
aint no chance we gone battle
shots in the air
guns to our heads we hearded like cattle
here start our cares
feckles and shackles and chains rattle
carried to a ship
not knowing why we been captured
could be the rapture
six more men got shot as they ran
they were just left there dying in the sand
packed on a ship like sardines in a can
no-one knows what the hell is the plan

YO! Can someone tell me what they think please? thanx.

Yo that was deep. i can tell you got talent
that shit was real too.
now you got me thinkin................

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yo thanx man. anyone else got nethin? c'mon, please dont sleep on this.

damn!! yo this is really gettin slept on man!! none of y'all aint got nothin to say?? please y'all tell me somethin!

It was good, but try to even out your lines so it flows better, maybe try to use some mutlies, your flow was alright, good topic and it felt deep, keep dropping, and if you get the chance check out me and Gene Pools peice called " Nice Guys Finish Last", he will be posting it up a little later today, thanks.

thanx man. any more feedback?

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