Keep dreaming son, your life has just begun...
no reason to run, when life gets hot like the sun...
lifes a beat..hit your drum, make your destiny come

sometimes people crave the grave mistreatin slaves
thats all in the past, now a days we forgive our ways
evil is in all of us, but try to sacrifice for anothers ray

of hope an gentle care, god i hope i have you here
to guide me, to show me the to the road thats clear
shed my tears..but yo god..we all just got here

god i really needa blesson or for you to answer my question
whys life so stresson? is it a painful lesson..of depression?
or just a journy of misdirections creating a suspension

our soldiers fought in war for our freedom, yet they die
who said good man last longer..they reached for the sky
alot sooner then a jail bird who dont care to b dead or alive

im dreaming to let loose of these demons that i meet in my sleep
screaming to keep pride and freedom, to never fall to concrete
believing theres no reason to even work hard for a treat

flustered by dead hopes fall from my tight rope life muz be a joke
im smoked dope this leaves me so stoked i was always provoked
to leave the world choked, to die cuz you cant see the antidote

im dope then smoked like hash fuk dis world ye all can kiss my ass
i work hard to turn into glass then im pushed constantly smashed
lifes simer to red an blue..clash..lifes a chick..always herassed

but im'a keep dreaming reachin out for oppertunities in life
hustle life as if i were cleaning releaving my capabilities..no strife
trustin im achieiving on this criabilites of one day gaining a wife

this is the beggining of my time...i raise up an take a climb
up that ladder sparkle an shine...sit back relax into a recline
im'a grow up an turn out fine..the beggining of'a mastermind

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

nice drop

beter then your last one, upped your vocab and made it longer.
Seemed like you worked a little bit on this. Nice and catchy drop.
Very interesting. Keep it up Rule..

peace

thanks krem...some more comments please??? thanks

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

Your emotions came through well in this. Though sometimes disrupted by rigid rhyme scene. It still came through well. A 'let rip' kind of piece which was quite unrelenting...

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thansk ye all apreciated any adivce wud bwe helpful

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

yo nice piece, good message you sending out there. Your scheme wasn't really mah thing, honestly... felt like sumtimes it just didn't flow that well.. don't know. Anywayz, keep it up, cuz this was a good drop.
Keep droppin, be hopin to read sumthing more from ya very soon

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