Flows BREEZE from SEAS, coldest MCEES FREEZE, so advanced at this here, got rap-in DEGREES

Perfect my game till it all THERE, love n ALL-FAIR, potential damage, korea bombs lyrics and WARFARE//

Got it WITHIN-ME, ain't use guns, but barrell EMPTY, don't mess
i STRESS, emphaise don't TEST-ME//

lost here, no FIND, bless pen, paper beats with my LINES,
hating this BEGIN like eminem "you lose your MIND"//

AWAITS, ANTICIPATES drops PERCIPATES, the personna is the HIGHEST, i'm the FLYEST, just ADMIRE-THIS//

Knowledge contesting rep the crew B.K, bring the hip hop to manchester,like the west and DRE-DAY//

Who's firing SHOTS, who's droppin all the Glocks, rush and push the power trip BOX, sound waves POPPING fools be DROPPIN//

"the firm" skills we got CAPABILITIES, vistin MENTAL
FACILITIES, rep our ABILITIES//

"I was born to SPIT MICS", flame IGNITE set ALIGHT,
VOCAL fire STEAM the RIGHT SITE, TIGHT//

outta here like COPS BUSTIN CRACK-HEADS, they say RAPS-DEAD,
nah only BEGINNING-COS i'm here and i SAID//

Lower BALLISTICS, defeat tabbed on your STATISTICS, while you
overestimate level, UNREALISTIC//

That bitch was DEAD-ON, began the LEAD-ON, found his HEAD-ON no crew when he made it BIG, he said they HAD-GONE//

haters RECIEVIN BLEEDIN, mcess bite like rats FEEDIN,
creativity the only skill you really be NEEDIN, READIN//

Never forget the first, who gave you the LIFTED, leave the one that DRIFTEDcos you that be GIFTED//

Leave brusies and CUTS, with RIPP-EN, 10 more scottie PIPP-ENS
you ain't feel this, cos you just be DICKIN//

like earl simmons, SLIPPIN, TRIPPIN, while i'm HITTIN, droppin bombs off BEATS like it was WRITTEN, SPITTEN//

the structure is not my usual, but it goes with the bars of the beat, so if you ain't feelin it, peep the beat

sorry its messed up again it should be like this:

Flows BREEZE from SEAS, coldest MCEES FREEZE, so advanced at this here, got rap-in DEGREES

Perfect my game till it all THERE, love n ALL-FAIR, potential damage, korea bombs lyrics and WARFARE//

Got it WITHIN-ME, ain't use guns, but barrell EMPTY, don't mess i STRESS, emphaise don't TEST-ME//

lost here, no FIND, bless pen, paper beats with my LINES, hating this BEGIN like eminem "you lose your MIND"//

AWAITS, ANTICIPATES drops PERCIPATES, the personna is the HIGHEST, i'm the FLYEST, just ADMIRE-THIS//

Knowledge contesting rep the crew B.K, bring the hip hop to manchester,like the west and DRE-DAY//

Who's firing SHOTS, who's droppin all the Glocks, rush and push the power trip BOX, sound waves POPPING fools be DROPPIN//

"the firm" skills we got CAPABILITIES, vistin MENTAL FACILITIES, rep our ABILITIES//

"I was born to SPIT MICS", flame IGNITE set ALIGHT, VOCAL fire STEAM the RIGHT SITE, TIGHT//

outta here like COPS BUSTIN CRACK-HEADS, they say RAPS-DEAD, nah only BEGINNING-COS i'm here and i SAID//

Lower BALLISTICS, defeat tabbed on your STATISTICS, while you overestimate level, UNREALISTIC//

That bitch was DEAD-ON, began the LEAD-ON, found his HEAD-ON no crew when he made it BIG, he said they HAD-GONE//

haters RECIEVIN BLEEDIN, mcess bite like rats FEEDIN, creativity the only skill you really be NEEDIN, READIN//

Never forget the first, who gave you the LIFTED, leave the one that DRIFTEDcos you that be GIFTED//

Leave brusies and CUTS, with RIPP-EN, 10 more scottie PIPP-ENS you ain't feel this, cos you just be DICKIN//

like earl simmons, SLIPPIN, TRIPPIN, while i'm HITTIN, droppin bombs off BEATS like it was WRITTEN, SPITTEN//

yo mans can i have some feedback, i will giv y'all some if you peep it

For a newbie...your droppin some pretty tight lines....some basic an complex it was a good flow an rhymed nicely...check out my shits homie 1

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

just give me some feed aight!!!!...

stop sleepin "i never sleep cos sleeps the cousin of death"!

good structure to this peice,nice use of vocab,afew nice multies,wordplay was good in some parts,hot in others,liked tha style of tha peice,good drop dawg,nice intro peice.

Hit mp peice up dawg.

Peace

aiyo... that was some tight shit man...
and that is a tight beat to free off of... nice man..
A.T.

yo thanks for the feedback, i will start givin feed to to others soon, aight!

One of the most intellectualized pieces i seen. The beat is off da chain too. i like your multis within the beat, like the flow matches perfec an shit. keep goin an you can be like me...lol...not! too many people wanna carbon copy! but keep it up dug (dog) !

yo thanks mans, i will check y'all soon aight, as soon as my board has got some tourneys goin, i will give y'all return on the favour of feed,

keep droppin, i'll bring some more to the table...

PEACE