PLEDGE
A was watching the rain fell on ma windscreen then sudenly pulled up to the shoulder
ther was something in the air a wasnt sure of, ma blood was gettin colder
a knew in ma heart that something was up
but it was too late to dodge the bullet....a heard the bullet stop
and the first thought was what would happen to you
because withough me theres no you...there was no truer two
but for what little time we had together i give thanks and pray

SYNTEXT
Tears fall when recollections of that Morbid day...
i was chillin with my family and the phone suddenly rang//
it was ya moms on the other end crying she asked for me...
she told me you got popped execution style you was on ya knees//
i feel to the ground my heart sank i cryed out in vain...
why was it you instead of me when deadly shots had to rain//
i would have traded places with you any day if i could have...
reminis on times we did shit and sat on the front porch after and laughed//

PLEDGE
A dont ko what was harder..takin tha bullet or watchin you cryin
The pain that i felt for you that day was worse than actually dying
They say yo life flashes befo you eyes when your about to kick it
but te only times that flashed before me where the times we spent doin trick shit
seems liek that was all that mattered in ma life and i aint dissapointed
but a know that i can watch over you..so do not cry man...just rejoyce it

SYNTEXT
you did time in JUVY for my many mistakes...
i'mma avenge ya death and whatever it takes//
to show you your still down to to ride....
as long u up there i know heavens on my side///
i shed alot of tears and then i wonder why...
shit ya moms is fine i know she still sits and crys//
i'll rep ya death till the fucking death of ME//
let ya spirit live on in my music for the world see//

PLEDGE
Do not anger my passing and do not carry such a burden on your back
dont you realise that you have dignity, something those coward who shot me lacked?
Fuck an dont lower yourself to that...what you think i dont the time for
for you to get yourself done for murder avenging my death? fuck a dont want that shit no more
hae a wife have a family get a job and get some money
and all be savin you a seat in heaven but yo..dont rush here to see me


Thru the madness light shine thru
it doesnt matter what you do
things will always come between friendships
but the broken pieces can be fixed
sometimes it takes time to recollect loved ones
other times you cant get hem off your mmind
but just remember when the time comes
that if they are a true friend..theyll never leave u behind

RIP
LIL DUKE

We'll miss you DAWG

ayo can we get some feedback on this

1st off....isnt your crew IJL...the title say IJS...but whatever
ima be a little harsh on ya 2 so you can elevate quick...your crew has to be the best...

Syntext
really REALLY liked it... the flow was nice and it hit hard just like pledge... great drop kid

Pledge
liked your verses....they had a good level of emotion... the flow was simple but thats a good thing for this kind of drop... vocab could have been better...sides that good drop

Both
MAIN PROBLEM...the 2 if you had nothing to do with each others lines... it looked like this was just bars ya both spit then put then together... if for example you went off pleadge...then syn would have described being shot on the highway...an angel on his boys shoulder...with ya skills that could have been ill

my 2 cents...take how you want

aiyo... that was fuckin deep as hell niggaz...
I was feelin that shit... right here (hits his heart)
yalls flow and shit was on, you made this shit come
up tight as hell... and yo... sorry to hear bout yo friend...
one of my bois past bout a month ago... I still miss em,
but this hit me hard... yall keep droppin

ayo nice crit i appreicaite the advise and ish.........uppin for crits

ayo holmes to all ...my verse was a tru story not to get at you with a false verse....His name was DUKE he was my best friend...we were like brothers he had my back and had his....
about a year ago his mom called me up crying and ish...he was his ex girlfreinds house to pick up his son and her sisters boyfriends brother executed him...they caught him but i'mma still get at him soon.....i miss him alot and morn everyday that i didn't go with him that night or maybe he mght have lived....so theres the story yo one love LIL DUKE

yo uppin for this shit stop sleepin

long ass shit but it was coo' tho dunny

damn that crit was long took me like 4 days to read it all lmao lets get some real crits upon this masterpiece shit..............................................

first of all..i'd like ta say sorry bout wut happined ta yah boy..wish yah the best man...but on to the peice

you 2 both came wel, sometime i felt your verses werent conected but sometimes it was mad ill, you both had deep emotion it was good, to maske it ebtetr i thnik you should put a multi or two in there and add some bigger vovab...make it perfect..all in all great drop check my callab wit pugklist peace you 2

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oh thanks for the crit i'll get at yours for gettin at mines in a min

nice drop maw . . i like ur style . . . holla at me for a colabo...
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