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Old 09-22-03, 12:21 PM   #1
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Broken Dreams

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My minds clogged up with broken dreams,
And the more i cry, the worse i feel,
Yet i cannot help the tears falling from my eyes;
I have lost everything in a heartbeat;
My entire life withers away before me,
And i can't help wondering if i'm being punished?,
Suddenly life has no meaning, I've become a lost soul,
Fading into a state of depression,
Not knowing or caring about the rest of the world,
My only escape from this trauma is to write;
To spill my anger onto the page like fresh tears,
In the hope that someone reading feels the same,
That some poor person understands the future i'm faced with.
I'm told time can be a great healer, but its been six months and i cannot sense a change,
See when you died you took my very existence with you,
And now i'm left alone in an empty world, small, afraid and helpless,
And after all this time i'm still left crying;
Praying for the strength to seek love again.


Moral: well its about a girl whos lost a long term boyfriend, unlike the old 'i got dumped' story, they've been seperated by deaths intervention, she is afraid to look for happiness because she feels that her lover would be unhappy to see her with someone else, the last line just about sums it up, she is praying for the strength to get through this turmoil and carry on living....

give me all your feed on this people, its quite a deep subject but i know a lot of people will be able to relate.

Peace and Love

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Old 09-22-03, 04:41 PM   #2
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iight

i can not relat to this straight on, ive never had a relationship where he has passed away, but i can relat in a different way. in a way where after you've broken up with some1, who was your whole life, and they change, in a bad way, the old friend you had died with the break up, they become a person, and you feel like they are gone forever, dead, and miss them greatly

even thou its not quiet the same, the poem could come across in different ways for different ppl, and i do here you.

its a pretty simple piece, not alot of detail, but enough, and i coudl feel emotion, but it could be my own emotion coming back thinking of the person i feel has long ago died now, that i miss ( and i feel so stupid saying that, but i do miss you ) and even if its my own emotion im feeling and not yours, thats still good cause then it was strong enough to stir up emotions in me that ive been trying to forget

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Old 09-23-03, 11:52 AM   #3
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Yeah thanQ i'm sorry to hear about your break up, i know its hard dealing with that scenario, i've been there many times believe me, i feel you. This poem was actually generated from an email i was sent about a girl who lost the person she loved and was contemplating suicide, asking for advice. It is a strong subject and i think that a lot of people reading will be able to relate in the way that you have Filed.

Thanx for your feed

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Old 09-24-03, 12:12 AM   #4
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There is no other way i can say it but it's exact. I lost someone very close to me so sudden. Over a girl.... I was so scared and mad I promised myself I would never love again. Being the person I am and after that time i accepted it, not easy at all but i did and worked it up. Can't just waste your life away. If he/she really did love you he/she would love to see you happy and be wit someone else. i'm blabin on. Good peice, along with filed it stired up the past i've been tryin to 4get. deep topic. keep feeding my brain and i'll be feedin you replys peace
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