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Old 09-20-03, 03:19 PM   #1
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I'm Sorry

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My First open mic ever im not good jus thought I should try something thanks…


I Decided To Play a Joke Confuse Minds For a Laugh
Dint Realise My Joke Was Leading To An Endless Path
I Created My Own Fate On a Friendship Quite Strong
I Was Wrong Took This Laugh For a Time To Long
Though I’d Get Away It So Im Not Denying It
Foolishly I Am For Even Trying It…
For a Specific Time I Stopped And Realised I Went To Far
I Should Have Never Underestimated Feeling At The Start
Amazed @ Hearing You Hate Me..It Was Sharper Than a Bullet…
Like I Lost a Piece Of Heart Cos Somebody Attempted To Pull it
I Don’t Blaim You For Being Mad @ The Way I Acted
I Should Have Not Been Shocked @ The Way You Reacted
I’m Kinda Sad Also Mad For Wot I Did At The Time
I Guess Our Friendship’s Being Lost…The Latest Sign
One More Chance? I Don’t Expect It All I Want Is Us To Be Mates..
I Dedicated To The First Reader Something I Had To State

The first read was my x gf
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Old 09-22-03, 10:05 AM   #2
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quite a weak peice overall.....................

but keep practicing dawg the shit will come!!!!!!
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Old 09-22-03, 11:49 AM   #3
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not bad for a first time, can elavate with some work , thought that

N.D.eva was a bit judgemental, it's his first ever, preiod, he need aiiiight, not brilliant but gotta admit will do well if he tries and studies the game..../peace
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Old 09-22-03, 06:16 PM   #4
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"I Decided To Play a Joke Confuse Minds For a Laugh
Dint Realise My Joke Was Leading To An Endless Path"
Feeling the way you started this dawg...
this here was aight... nothing too special, but it had some potential... I wasn't really feeling ya flow too much, and it was pretty basic...
Just keep at it man... and don't forget to check other cat's joints, might pick up a lil something from it... lol...

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