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Old 09-20-03, 03:10 PM   #1
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The Se7en

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It was the best of, Times,
Lines, indented the, sentiment,
Bent, misfigured and, defaced,
Paced, a heart beat of a, lone,
Known, for the while in all, vein,
Main-ly, for locking forgetfullness,
At best, I cannot try to, forget,
Four yet, a burning bright blue, star,
Cars, and parking lots and town, fairs,
Hairs, are splitting as we're to converse,

It was the worst of , Times,
Lines, now laced with, thoughts,
Taut-ly tied I lost my tinted, eyes,
Flies, of an arsonist lit with plain, fire,
Desire, to achieve a solum sought for, goal,
Bowl, dish and silverwear pots and, pans,
Hands, brittle and bloody but they, work,
Forked, is the tounge of a serpants, jaw,
Raw confused with a virgin idea, too,
Who can claim they're his son?

A heavy heart I have to, Hold,
Told, was I warned not to, drop,
Stop, take a needed lengthy, break,
Shake, assembling your memories, how,
Now, you take the first step, direction,
Perfecting, a new for ones I held, mute,
Fruits, of my labor are but chari-ty,
See, holy scriptions upon my, arm,
Alarm, are the few who be to, choose,
Shoes, imprints are lost on the, beach.

A simple thought is all I care to, think,
Sink-ing, fast as time will pass and, heal,
Deal-ing wiht open wounds of lemon, salt,
Hault, in the halls for Imissed her call once, again,
A friend, one who I confide to hide my, truely,
Loose-leaf, words of emotional trains of, burnden,
Hurting, all your surrounding of my mohter, nature,
Later, people fear a dream that he had to, have,
Baths, and baths in the oatmeal colored, skin,
Begin with me as an angel attempts one more new.

She was inconsevably brought to, birth,
Worth, the world and all I'm fit to give, away,
We say, that pain dies down sounding of, less,
Bless, the bliss for it happens to miss the, point,
Joint, in spirit torn by logic and, sense,
Dense, is the head to imbed me, immortal,
A portal, opening suffering in a unit, cell,
Tell, us why lies are how they jsut comuni-cate,
Late, is the man catching up playing the idiots, delights,
Bright, burning blue but can this not be surreal?

Of all pretty horese, I'm a, unicorn,
With a horn, so I rush to a tree and, crash,
Smash, until I'm the same as the, rest,
Lest, we all comform to make for comfortable, of,
Love, to which selects express with lone sol-itude,
Undo, all that is done to raise the, daughter,
Water, I'll walk on and miricales to, perform,
A worn, old, and ratty cloth is at first, felt,
Dealt, with what was given to the select,
Detect-tion in a moment of suspense,

I'm an angel with broken wings,
Sings, does the sirens' voice of, desete,
Defeat, I wont admit as I lie with, snakes,
Lakes, of tears form our new ocean's endless, floor,
Nevermore, the raven speakith for I am my own, pain,
Sain, in my mind do I feel so, nervous,
Heard this, all before from other tortured, souls,
Control sets me apart so who says all, nay,
way, to kill a spirit in it's only, prime,
Time, will tell SE7EN is they're second gift to us.
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Old 09-20-03, 03:19 PM   #2
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poetic stanza very well incorporated!!!!
stuck thropugh chronological sequence....
very ill usage and content 10/10 this was to dope
hit me up
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Old 09-20-03, 03:33 PM   #3
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yeah thanks for the support dawg, trust me, ill hit you up

peace.geo.
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Old 09-23-03, 06:28 AM   #4
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feelin ya flow, some good multis, but i didn't like the structure too much and i couldn't really make out a topic it all seemed abit mix and match

overall 5/10..................it might seem low but ive given alot worse out dawg,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,, ,,

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