Lacks enthusiasm and when tired and no comparison to usual
Energy is crucial to be lyrically brutal...no expansion to you all

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This is what you get when your caught tired...blardy blah blah
Then have to laugh off when thoughts expired...hardy har har
I've hardly done any bars and yet times ticking away from me
Is time testing me? fuck now i've questions outta the ordinary
Plans going unaccordingly yet brains set in frame with answers
To lazy to shit isn't pampered cuz crazy scripts left hampered
Tampered with potential now scampering for essenitial needs
There is no eventual lead in reach till you've done the deads
Never will you suceed if your lazy and that impedes in me daily
Acting passively will never resulty in rapping affably and gaily
Is life mainly rapping? fuck theres another question supressing
Depressing my life...i've just put a triple just so im impressing
Fuck theres an example to grab a knife^^

Stab myself twice cuz i don't excite nothing in life, so im useless
Atleast i took a second stab at it, man im bad at being ruthless

Fuck im loosing my mind...I

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Whats the point in that? well i had to do something to be active
Relax is something much needed!! really but you need to practice
No!!...You've extracted equations that your mind wont be phazing
When staying idle then loosing won't be appliable but not gaining
Flavourings for savouring experiance but found an interferance
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Not me...i need some zest in my style...but i can't when im fucking tired like this...L-O-L...

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Not bad bro, original topic to work with, you stayed on point throuout, i didnt really like the opener cause that was the weirdiest rhyme ive ever seen, but aside from that it wasnt bad, good use of multi's and internal rhyming, strong writers voice, you really directed this piece how you wanted, i didnt really like the i dont belong here nonscence but aside from that it was good.

Guess who's back in the mothafuckin house?
half black, half white chick i call her minnie mouse!

LMMFAO!

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nice drop man. I liked how u played around with ur rhyme scheme and their was a nice flow through pretty much the whole thing. good use of multi's and vocab. keep droppin bro.

check out my collab with masta C which I'll be postin up in about an hour called "2 of a kind" if ur still online. leave some feedback if u do. thanx in advance.

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this was an interestinhg joint
liked the sort of craziness of it
made for a change in the usual stuff u see posted


'Stab myself twice cuz i don't excite nothing in life, so im useless
Atleast i took a second stab at it, man im bad at being ruthless

^best line....funny shit too

ive been in that sorta mood where u just think fuck it
whats the point in shit kinda related in a strange way
good shizzat

yeah it was a nice drop, i enjoyed reading it, it was good, your vocab was good and you had good use of multies, Your flow was nice through out the whole peice, keep dropping.

Feeling this...
concept was cool... and even if you really was tired when you wrote it, shit was put together righ, you came strong with it...
this shit flowed all the way through, I was feeling that...
Kinda short, but that's understandable...
Tight drop man...

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