yo when i was typin this out for y'all to read i figured that y'all probably wasnt gonna see the flow the same way that i do. first of all each line in the verses is one bar long. second my delivery is a speedy one. this aint an exceptionally fast rhyme but some part are said pretty quickly, dont mistake this for the thing not flowing. Peace

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this is a message from the youth to the youth/
some of us are tired of fools drug abuse/
some of us are tired of hearing guns shoot/
makin youth end up in hearse like they life aint no use/
always both sides are scared to call a truce/
dont wanna leave and make partnerships loose/
greed of the body will make fools untrue/
dont know when they'll turn around on you/
seems that people are blind to what were being put thru/
scared to walk on the street because of what fools do?/
scared to walk on the street wearing your own jewels?/
scared of theiefs packing heat wanna steal from u?/
see G on TV wanna walk them shoes?/
if you think it looks good brethren u confused/
you make the whole comunutity wanna blow a fuse/
you the problem with it make the youth look like fools.

HOOK:
youth listen up cause the youth wanna talk,
by the time im finished thats a lesson been taught,
need to finish up all the evil and slaughter,
so amongst each other were safe to walk!
i told u once and i will tell u agen
u need to watch out who u callin your friends
fools turn around and for money kill their kin,
not getting out there life of sin!

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you need to be watchin who u callin your friends
brothers comin up outta jail wanna go back in agen
and now guns and knifes knifes is the latest trend?
thats kind of foolishness nees to come to an end
only fools choose a bad life then dont wanna bend
brought up in crap for there whole life and then
the life takes root foolishness is the stem
watered by money dem nuh waan go agen
there are lots of fights that people get past
so they more confident when they hear guns blast
the mentality is that they think they'll get past
think you can dodge a bullet when u the one its aimed at?
gangsters gettin better at aiming guns fast
bullets dont give a damn about your past
they dont care bout if your poor or if your makin a stash
if its your first gun fight it can still be your last.

HOOK

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aint nothin ever been right for blacks
from 500 years ago when we were hearing whips crack
to now from the media we still under attack
acting like black people only know drugs and gats
some black youth seem to enforce that
instead of getting out stayin in life of crap
im gonna work hard till christ comes back
to better myself not hang in gang packs
i dont care if im not makin a stack
i aint gettin involved in the trede of crack
stay legit and see how the press like that
spit pure knowledge on all of my tracks
cant keep the black man down so we aint really trapped
its a mental choice to make chains collapse
its a simple decision to undo the clasps
or u filing your soul like an emotional rasp

HOOK

Yeah. .
i thought this piece was actually pretty decent, it flowed good to me as i read it, it could of used more internals and multi's but this seeemed like it came from the heart, it was something YOU wanted to adress, and that really shone through in this piece. i liked how at time, you'd start the lines with the same beginning words, hat really built up the emotion in the lines, and i felt that

all in all a decent piece my man, just try working on those internals and multi's, you'll get better with practice.

Peace!

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word i agree if you had multis that shit would have been much hotter but all around that shit was fucken dope good drop

damn dude i thought that shit was definetely dope, i was feelin the vocab, wordplay, and content. i agree wit everyone else u could use a few more multis, but overall that shit was phat good post.

yo can u return the favor on mine, its called "changes", thanx

peace.....

camarac said it best multis and internals would help, but you've got that emotion thing down, sometimes when you're coming from the heart you don't worry about making you rhyme scheme complex and different you say the words that get your point across. the flow isn't that bad and i caught what you meant by its not really fast but it is a little quick. if you revamped this made your thoughts a little more precise this would be a dope audio drop. good drop.

Yeah, you ripped that shit. I was feeling it and I agree with you on the topic, so good shot. Flow and wordplay was on point and this was a sick ass piece. Keep droppin.

thanx y'all. anyone else got somethin to say?